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作者: 安全东    时间: 2010-3-10 17:14
标题: [原创]七律 雨霁
<p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN-TOP: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0cm" align="center" center? TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm="0cm" 0cm?><span style="FONT-SIZE: 22pt; FONT-FAMILY: 黑体">雨霁<span lang="EN-US"><?xml:namespace prefix = o ns = "urn:schemas-microsoft-comfficeffice" /><o:p></o:p></span></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN-TOP: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0cm" align="center" center? TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm="0cm" 0cm?><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new="New">雨霁云开万里余,青山遥对野人居。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN-TOP: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0cm" align="center" center? TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm="0cm" 0cm?><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new="New">昨宵梦自寒中觉,隔岁花当砌外疏。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN-TOP: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0cm" align="center" center? TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm="0cm" 0cm?><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new="New">袖底清风香缕缕,莺边红日暖如如。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN-TOP: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0cm" align="center" center? TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm="0cm" 0cm?><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new="New">一年生计谋宜早,要趁新晴理稼锄。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN-TOP: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0cm" align="center" center? TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm="0cm" 0cm?><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"><font face="Times new=" New? Roman?><span style="mso-spacerun: yes">                </span>2010</font></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new="New">.</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"><font face="Times new=" New? Roman?>3</font></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new="New">.</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"><font face="Times new=" New? Roman?>10<o:p></o:p></font></span></p>
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作者: 一行白鹭    时间: 2010-3-10 20:15
欣赏好诗,尤喜结。
作者: 安全东    时间: 2010-3-11 10:44
<div class=\"quote\"><b>以下是引用<i>一行白鹭</i>在2010-03-10 20:15:49的发言:</b><br/>欣赏好诗,尤喜结。 </div>
<p>谢白鹭君首鉴。</p>
作者: 锄月花樵    时间: 2010-3-12 10:44
<div class=\"quote\"><b>以下是引用<i>一行白鹭</i>在2010-03-10 20:15:49的发言:</b><br/>欣赏好诗,尤喜结。 </div>
<p>同感,同赏!</p>
作者: 燕赵悲歌    时间: 2010-3-12 21:03
<div class=\"quote\"><b>以下是引用<i>安全东</i>在2010-03-10 17:14:39的发言:</b><br/>
<p class=\"MsoNormal\" align=\"center\" center? TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm=\"0cm\" 0cm?><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 黑体; FONT-SIZE: 22pt\">雨霁<span lang=\"EN-US\"><?xml:namespace prefix = o ns = \"urn:schemas-microsoft-comfficeffice\" /><o:p></o:p></span></span></p>
<p class=\"MsoNormal\" align=\"center\" center? TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm=\"0cm\" 0cm?><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\"\'\"\" New? Roman?? new=\"New\" ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?;>雨霁云开万里余,青山遥对野人居。</span><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt\" lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class=\"MsoNormal\" align=\"center\" center? TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm=\"0cm\" 0cm?><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\"\'\"\" New? Roman?? new=\"New\" ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?;>昨宵梦自寒中觉,隔岁花当砌外疏。</span><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt\" lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class=\"MsoNormal\" align=\"center\" center? TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm=\"0cm\" 0cm?><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\"\'\"\" New? Roman?? new=\"New\" ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?;>袖底清风香缕缕,莺边红日暖如如。</span><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt\" lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class=\"MsoNormal\" align=\"center\" center? TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm=\"0cm\" 0cm?><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\"\'\"\" New? Roman?? new=\"New\" ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?;>一年生计宜谋早,要趁新晴理稼锄。</span><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt\" lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class=\"MsoNormal\" align=\"center\" center? TEXT-ALIGN: 0pt; 0cm=\"0cm\" 0cm?><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt\" lang=\"EN-US\"><font face=\"Times new=\" New? Roman?><span style=\"mso-spacerun: yes\">                </span>2010</font></span><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\"\'\"\" New? Roman?? new=\"New\" ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?;>.</span><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt\" lang=\"EN-US\"><font face=\"Times new=\" New? Roman?>3</font></span><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\"\'\"\" New? Roman?? new=\"New\" ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?;>.</span><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt\" lang=\"EN-US\"><font face=\"Times new=\" New? Roman?>10<o:p></o:p></font></span></p></div>
<p>颈联不用叠字会不会更稳当些?</p>
作者: 司马长风    时间: 2010-3-12 21:39
<span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\" Roman?? new=\"New\" ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New?>一年生计宜谋早</span>---宜谋早,是“宜早谋”的倒装,个人认为“谋宜早”还顺口些。
作者: 垒石    时间: 2010-3-12 23:30
只得一句“<span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\" Roman?? new=\"New\" ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New?>昨宵梦自寒中觉</span>”
作者: 安全东    时间: 2010-3-13 10:57
并谢诸位吟兄临赏撷疵。容酌改之。再谢。




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