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标题: 夜思 [打印本页]
作者: 燕赵悲歌    时间: 2010-3-26 21:10
标题: 夜思
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<p style="TEXT-ALIGN: left; LINE-HEIGHT: 12pt; MARGIN-TOP: 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 31.92pt; MARGIN-BOTTOM: 0pt" class="p0"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: '宋体'; BACKGROUND: rgb(255,255,255); FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-spacerun: 'yes'">太上琴音久未谙，星光几点到江南。偏逢苦雨愁何寄，残醉清宵梦更酣。</span></p>
<p style="TEXT-ALIGN: left; LINE-HEIGHT: 12pt; MARGIN-TOP: 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 31.92pt; MARGIN-BOTTOM: 0pt" class="p0"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: '宋体'; BACKGROUND: rgb(255,255,255); FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-spacerun: 'yes'">花市萧条灯已烬，画楼弓影月初三。心拴孤岛同谁诉，只与秋风作絮谭。</span></p>
<p style="TEXT-ALIGN: left; LINE-HEIGHT: 12pt; MARGIN-TOP: 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 31.92pt; MARGIN-BOTTOM: 0pt" class="p0"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: '宋体'; BACKGROUND: rgb(255,255,255); FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-spacerun: 'yes'"></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: '宋体'; BACKGROUND: rgb(255,255,255); FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-spacerun: 'yes'"><?xml:namespace prefix = o ns = "urn:schemas-microsoft-comfficeffice" /><o:p></o:p></span> </p>
<p style="TEXT-ALIGN: left; LINE-HEIGHT: 12pt; MARGIN-TOP: 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 31.92pt; MARGIN-BOTTOM: 0pt" class="p0"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: '宋体'; BACKGROUND: rgb(255,255,255); FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-spacerun: 'yes'">良宵春梦渐生愁，泣此年华付水流。情系斗牛危北角，人同宿鸟早惊秋。</span></p>
<p style="TEXT-ALIGN: left; LINE-HEIGHT: 12pt; MARGIN-TOP: 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 31.92pt; MARGIN-BOTTOM: 0pt" class="p0"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: '宋体'; BACKGROUND: rgb(255,255,255); FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-spacerun: 'yes'">举头犹是汉家月，入眼难分晴雨楼。赊此灵魂归一醉，凄凉尘世把心囚。</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: '宋体'; BACKGROUND: rgb(255,255,255); FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-spacerun: 'yes'"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
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[此贴子已经被作者于2010-03-26 23:34:19编辑过]
作者: 燕赵悲歌    时间: 2010-3-28 15:56
<div class=\"quote\"><b>以下是引用<i>湘弦绝响</i>在2010-03-28 14:07:34的发言：</b><br/><strong><font size=\"4\" face=\"楷体_GB2312\">前首第五句还可以修整一下。</font></strong> </div>
<p>回总版,自己也觉得不满意.  尾联也是改过的.</p>
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<p>试改:</p>
<p style=\"TEXT-ALIGN: left; LINE-HEIGHT: 12pt; MARGIN-TOP: 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 31.92pt; MARGIN-BOTTOM: 0pt\" class=\"p0\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: \'宋体\'; BACKGROUND: rgb(255,255,255); FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-spacerun: \'yes\'\"><font size=\"3\">太上琴音久未谙，星光几点到江南。偏逢苦雨愁何寄，残醉清宵梦更酣。</font></span></p>
<p style=\"TEXT-ALIGN: left; LINE-HEIGHT: 12pt; MARGIN-TOP: 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 31.92pt; MARGIN-BOTTOM: 0pt\" class=\"p0\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: \'宋体\'; BACKGROUND: rgb(255,255,255); FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-spacerun: \'yes\'\"><font size=\"3\">小镇栖身春已尽，画楼弓影月初三。心拴孤岛同谁诉，只与秋风作絮谭。</font></span><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: \'宋体\'; BACKGROUND: rgb(255,255,255); FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-spacerun: \'yes\'\"><?xml:namespace prefix = o ns = \"urn:schemas-microsoft-comfficeffice\" /><o:p></o:p></span></p>
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作者: 锄月花樵    时间: 2010-3-28 19:42
赏读，“<span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt; BACKGROUND: rgb(255,255,255); FONT-FAMILY: \'宋体\'; mso-spacerun: \'yes\'\">举头犹是汉家月，入眼难分晴雨楼”。有意致，尤喜。</span>
作者: 尘笛    时间: 2010-3-29 00:30
最喜欢最后一句了。只是这个“把”字好象味道还犹不足，还不如用“识”还是什么的把这种主动化作补被动更有味道些。就算我胡说啦



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