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标题: 再题北戴河（三联） [打印本页]

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作者: 玉笥山翁    时间: 2009-8-30 15:00
标题: 再题北戴河（三联）
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<p><font style="FONT-SIZE: 24px" color="#990066"><strong>再题北戴河（三联）</strong></font></p>
<p><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#cc3399"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr>一</font></p>
<p><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#cc3399">燕语纵秋波，更?碧西山莲韵；</font></p>
<p><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#cc3399">霞光横玉带，恰怡红碣石诗帘。</font></p>
<p><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#cc3399"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 二</font></p>
<p><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#cc3399">旭日、金鸥、碧涛，万象但凭心赏；</font></p>
<p><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#cc3399">秦皇、魏武、红石，千秋独让人雄。</font></p>
<p><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#cc3399"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr>三</font></p>
<p><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#cc3399">本欲赋新章，却有竣青日影，沫若涛声，全共晨钟成绝响；</font></p>
<p><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#cc3399">幸能逢胜会，得观魏武鞭踪，秦皇碣石，也从秋燕读遗篇。</font></p>
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<p><font color="#cc3399"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr>  <wbr>于北戴河行旅</font></p></div>
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作者: 四海一棋    时间: 2009-10-8 20:25
第三联不错，结句有力！前二联内涵不足，遣词也许再细琢。问好！

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