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作者: 潇湘词 时间: 2010-7-3 11:37
标题: [原创]【天香】?荷

<p class="MsoNormal" style="TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan" align="left"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 16pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New="New" Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New="New" Roman'">【天香】?荷</span></b><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 16pt"><?xml:namespace prefix = o ns = "urn:schemas-microsoft-com

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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 15pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New="New"  Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New="New"  Roman'">前世回眸，今生夙愿，遂应池塘同<b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal"><span style="COLOR: #0070c0">瓮</span></b>。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 15pt"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 15pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New="New"  Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New="New"  Roman'">伞叶连根，莲苔并蒂，未了天涯残<b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal"><span style="COLOR: #0070c0">梦</span></b>。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 15pt"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 15pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New="New"  Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New="New"  Roman'">此时还记：将执手、欲牵还<b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal"><span style="COLOR: #0070c0">送</span></b>。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 15pt"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 15pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New="New"  Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New="New"  Roman'">衣袂翻飘念盼，清波舞摇虚<b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal"><span style="COLOR: #0070c0">空</span></b>！</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 15pt"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 15pt"><o:p> </o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 15pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New="New"  Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New="New"  Roman'">千竿碧茎独<b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal"><span style="COLOR: #0070c0">众</span></b>。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 15pt"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 15pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New="New"  Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New="New"  Roman'">雨中萍、水帘桥<b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal"><span style="COLOR: #0070c0">洞</span></b>。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 15pt"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 15pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New="New"  Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New="New"  Roman'">流向江河尽处，玉箫悲<b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal"><span style="COLOR: #0070c0">恸</span></b>。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 15pt"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 15pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New="New"  Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New="New"  Roman'">呜咽招来彩<b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal"><span style="COLOR: #0070c0">凤</span></b>。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 15pt"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 15pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New="New"  Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New="New"  Roman'">向伊去、殷殷问心<b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal"><span style="COLOR: #0070c0">痛</span></b>。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 15pt"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 15pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New="New"  Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New="New"  Roman'">每寸相思，多番捉<b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal"><span style="COLOR: #0070c0">弄</span></b>！</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 15pt"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt">【天香】此调以<u>贺铸</u>《东山乐府》为准。九十六字，前片四仄韵，后片六仄韵。<span lang="EN-US"><o:p></o:p></span></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt">【定格】<span lang="EN-US"><o:p></o:p></span></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span class="zhong"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt">中</span></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt">仄平平，平平仄仄，仄仄平平平<span class="yun1">仄</span><span class="yun0">（韵）</span>。<span lang="EN-US"><br/></span>仄仄平平，平平<span class="zhong">中</span>仄，仄仄平平平<span class="yun1">仄</span><span class="yun0">（韵）</span>。<span lang="EN-US"><br/></span>仄平平仄，平仄仄、仄平平<span class="yun1">仄</span><span class="yun0">（韵）</span>。<span lang="EN-US"><br/></span>平仄平平仄仄，平平仄平平<span class="yun1">仄</span><span class="yun0">（韵）</span>。<span lang="EN-US"><br/><br/></span>平平仄平仄<span class="yun1">仄</span><span class="yun0">（韵）</span>。<span lang="EN-US"><br/></span>仄平平、仄平平<span class="yun1">仄</span><span class="yun0">（韵）</span>。<span lang="EN-US"><br/></span>平仄平平仄仄，仄平平<span class="yun1">仄</span><span class="yun0">（韵）</span>。<span lang="EN-US"><br/></span>平仄平平仄<span class="yun1">仄</span><span class="yun0">（韵）</span>。<span lang="EN-US"><br/></span>仄平仄、平平仄平<span class="yun1">仄</span><span class="yun0">（韵）</span>。<span lang="EN-US"><br/></span>仄仄平平，平平仄<span class="yun1">仄</span><span class="yun0">（韵）</span>。<span lang="EN-US"><o:p></o:p></span></span></p>

作者: 楚狂人 时间: 2010-7-4 08:19
<span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 15pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\" ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?? new=\"New\" Roman?; New?>每寸相思，多番捉<b style=\"mso-bidi-font-weight: normal\"><span style=\"COLOR: #0070c0\">弄</span></b>！</span>结幽婉有余意。

作者: 懒石一块 时间: 2010-7-4 19:16
多番捉弄，捉弄到神来之句。

作者: 潇湘词 时间: 2011-8-22 22:04
多番捉弄，好折磨啊。呵呵。

作者: 塞上樵人 时间: 2011-8-23 03:50
不乏佳句，但也有不宜解之处。“伞叶连根，莲苔并蒂，未了天涯残梦”，是指荷与荷吗？“流向江河尽处，玉箫悲恸”，樵人愚钝，不明其意，望潇湘斑斑施教。问好首版！

作者: 文若水 时间: 2011-8-23 06:36
品赏，支持个！

作者: 一阳居士 时间: 2011-8-23 09:48
拜读佳作，问候潇湘首版！

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