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标题: 旧宅记忆（六首 新韵） [打印本页]
作者: 寒江孤篷    时间: 2010-7-26 18:25
标题: 旧宅记忆（六首 新韵）
  
<p class="p0" style="TEXT-ALIGN: center" align="center"><span><font size="6"><strong>旧宅记忆六首</strong></font>（新韵）<span lang="EN-US"><?xml:namespace prefix = o ns = "urn:schemas-microsoft-comfficeffice" /><o:p></o:p></span></span></p>
<p class="p0" style="TEXT-ALIGN: center" align="center"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 22pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.0pt">旧宅<span lang="EN-US"><o:p></o:p></span></span></b></p>
<p class="p0" style="TEXT-ALIGN: center" align="center"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 22pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.0pt"><font size="5">满户葱茏带紫霞，小楼卓立亦堪夸。<span lang="EN-US"><o:p></o:p></span></font></span></p>
<p class="p0" style="TEXT-ALIGN: center" align="center"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 22pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.0pt"><font size="5">枝头一盏溶溶月，银杏飘香是我家。<span lang="EN-US"><o:p></o:p></span></font></span></p>
<p class="p0" style="TEXT-ALIGN: center" align="center"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 22pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.0pt">晨练</span></b><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 22pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.0pt"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="p0" style="TEXT-ALIGN: center" align="center"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 22pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.0pt"><font size="5">烁烁疏星月半明，清晨盥洗亦匆匆。<span lang="EN-US"><o:p></o:p></span></font></span></p>
<p class="p0" style="TEXT-ALIGN: center" align="center"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 22pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.0pt"><font size="5">天天锻炼出门早，踩响邻家犬吠声。<span lang="EN-US"><o:p></o:p></span></font></span></p>
<p class="p0" style="TEXT-ALIGN: center" align="center"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 22pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.0pt">种菜</span></b><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 22pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.0pt"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="p0" style="TEXT-ALIGN: center" align="center"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 22pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.0pt"><font size="5">小院闲将绿意插，三畦韭菜两畦瓜。<span lang="EN-US"><o:p></o:p></span></font></span></p>
<p class="p0" style="TEXT-ALIGN: center" align="center"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 22pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.0pt"><font size="5">门前结满鲜蔬果，爬向墙头是彩霞。<span lang="EN-US"><o:p></o:p></span></font></span></p>
<p class="p0" style="TEXT-ALIGN: center" align="center"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 22pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.0pt">丝瓜<span lang="EN-US"><o:p></o:p></span></span></b></p>
<p class="p0" style="TEXT-ALIGN: center" align="center"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 22pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.0pt"><font size="5">夏日黄花带露开，蔓须趁夜过阳台。<span lang="EN-US"><o:p></o:p></span></font></span></p>
<p class="p0" style="TEXT-ALIGN: center" align="center"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 22pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.0pt"><font size="5">数只野雀衔风去，一对蛱蝶逐梦来。<span lang="EN-US"><o:p></o:p></span></font></span></p>
<p class="p0" style="TEXT-ALIGN: center" align="center"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 22pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.0pt">读书</span></b><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 22pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.0pt"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="p0" style="TEXT-ALIGN: center" align="center"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 22pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.0pt"><font size="5">满柜诗书拥敝庐，湖光山色亦堪租。<span lang="EN-US"><o:p></o:p></span></font></span></p>
<p class="p0" style="TEXT-ALIGN: center" align="center"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 22pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.0pt"><font size="5">黄金我富三千卷，阵阵清风就月读。<span lang="EN-US"><o:p></o:p></span></font></span></p>
<p class="p0" style="TEXT-ALIGN: center" align="center"><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 22pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.0pt">吟诗<span lang="EN-US"><o:p></o:p></span></span></b></p>
<p class="p0" style="TEXT-ALIGN: center" align="center"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 22pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.0pt"><font size="5">秃笔一枝吟岁华，神邀李杜近仙家。</font></span></p>
<p class="p0" style="TEXT-ALIGN: center" align="center"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 22pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.0pt"></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 22pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.0pt; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times new=" AR-SA? mso-bidi-language: EN-US; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN; mso-fareast-language: 1.0pt; mso-font-kerning: Roman?; ?Times mso-bidi-font-family: New? new="New"><font size="5">持箫昨夜吹明月，滑落玑珠似酽茶。</font></span></p>
[此贴子已经被司马长风于2010-7-30 22:28:00编辑过]
作者: 月影轩主    时间: 2010-7-28 12:31
<p>平凡之语，往往能出不平凡之意。</p>
<p>故诗之好坏，并非取决于典故多寡、文词是否绚烂等。</p>
<p>观察细微、想象丰富、不作常人语，即使学问功底欠缺些，亦能有好作品。</p>
<p>当然，要写出意韵深远的作品，多读书多思考还是很必要的。</p>
<p>看了楼主的大作，随便发一些感慨，与看到的共勉：）</p>
<p>“踩响邻家犬吠声。”此句甚有趣.</p>
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作者: 司马长风    时间: 2010-7-30 22:30
<font color=\"#0000ff\" size=\"3\">附议轩主。《旧宅》、《晨练》、《读书》之什甚佳，只是新韵读来颇不习惯，尤其“匆”字音过远。</font>



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