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『律诗绝句』（原创）七绝（轱辘体）*一曲临江对月弹
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作者:
雪羚羊
时间:
2010-8-7 21:03
标题:
『律诗绝句』（原创）七绝（轱辘体）*一曲临江对月弹
<font color="#000000"><font size="4"><b><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em">七绝（轱辘体）*一曲临江对月弹<br/><br/></font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em">一曲临江对月弹</font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em">，花亭沉醉吟诗篇。</font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"><br/><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em">兰舟归晚荷塘误，鸥鹭惊飞水笼烟。</font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></b><wbr><br/><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"><b><wbr></b><wbr></font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"><br/><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"><b><wbr>浓云薄雾意缠绵，<font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em">一曲临江对月弹</font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em">。</b><wbr></font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"><br/><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"><b><wbr>把酒东篱香冷袖，风凉玉露碧波寒。</b><wbr></font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"><br/><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"><b><wbr></b><wbr></font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"><br/><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"><b><wbr>锦冷香消夜幕寒，万千愁绪上眉端。</b><wbr></font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"><br/><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"><b><wbr>凭窗侧耳征鸿过，<font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em">一曲临江对月弹</font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em">。</b></font></font></font>
作者:
司马长风
时间:
2010-8-7 22:01
<font color=\"#0000ff\" size=\"3\">喜其二。一、三转轴句衔接得不十分贴切自然，其一之二、四句出律。</font>
作者:
雪羚羊
时间:
2010-8-9 14:06
<p>谢谢司马版主点评。嗯，须再斟酌。</p>
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