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作者: 暗香疏影    时间: 2010-9-6 22:46
标题: [原创]临江仙二首
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<p class="MsoNormal" style="LINE-HEIGHT: 22pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-line-height-rule: exactly; mso-pagination: widow-orphan" align="left"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312">【临江仙】<span lang="EN-US"><?xml:namespace prefix = o ns = "urn:schemas-microsoft-comfficeffice" /><o:p></o:p></span></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="LINE-HEIGHT: 22pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-line-height-rule: exactly; mso-pagination: widow-orphan" align="left"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312">文<span lang="EN-US">/</span>暗香疏影<span lang="EN-US"><o:p></o:p></span></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="LINE-HEIGHT: 22pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-line-height-rule: exactly; mso-pagination: widow-orphan" align="left"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312">谁忆风来幽涧水，清泠一夜西桥。</span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="LINE-HEIGHT: 22pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-line-height-rule: exactly; mso-pagination: widow-orphan" align="left"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312">碧波烟雨锁飞潮。疏红知我意，淡淡褪千娇。<span lang="EN-US"><o:p></o:p></span></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="LINE-HEIGHT: 22pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-line-height-rule: exactly; mso-pagination: widow-orphan" align="left"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312">世事觉来如旧梦，回眸唯叹云飘。</span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="LINE-HEIGHT: 22pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-line-height-rule: exactly; mso-pagination: widow-orphan" align="left"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312">几番惆怅几番消？独余三两事，隐入玉眉梢。<span lang="EN-US"><o:p></o:p></span></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="LINE-HEIGHT: 22pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-line-height-rule: exactly; mso-pagination: widow-orphan" align="left"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312"><o:p> </p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="LINE-HEIGHT: 22pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-line-height-rule: exactly; mso-pagination: widow-orphan" align="left"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312">【临江仙】<span lang="EN-US"><o:p></o:p></span></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="LINE-HEIGHT: 22pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-line-height-rule: exactly; mso-pagination: widow-orphan" align="left"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312">文<span lang="EN-US">/</span>暗香疏影<span lang="EN-US"><o:p></o:p></span></span></p></o:p></span>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="LINE-HEIGHT: 22pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-line-height-rule: exactly; mso-pagination: widow-orphan" align="left"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312">隐约江南飞蝶舞，亭亭枝上逍遥。</span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="LINE-HEIGHT: 22pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-line-height-rule: exactly; mso-pagination: widow-orphan" align="left"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312">春风影里弄芭蕉。韶光难解意，依旧笑阿娇。<span lang="EN-US"><o:p></o:p></span></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="LINE-HEIGHT: 22pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-line-height-rule: exactly; mso-pagination: widow-orphan" align="left"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312">人海擦肩成过客，前尘世事难了。</span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal" style="LINE-HEIGHT: 22pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-line-height-rule: exactly; mso-pagination: widow-orphan" align="left"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312">闲来落笔锁重霄。此间无语处，梦里倚梅梢。<span lang="EN-US"><o:p></o:p></span></span></p>
[此贴子已经被作者于2010-9-8 22:18:04编辑过]
作者: 一阳居士    时间: 2010-9-8 08:30
<span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312\">“谁忆风来幽涧鸣”，“鸣”字处为仄声，出律。</span>
作者: 一阳居士    时间: 2010-9-8 08:31
<div class=\"quote\"><b>以下是引用<i>暗香疏影</i>在2010-9-6 22:46:23的发言：</b><br/>
<p>  </p>
<p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"LINE-HEIGHT: 22pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-line-height-rule: exactly\" align=\"left\"><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312\">【临江仙】<span lang=\"EN-US\"><?xml:namespace prefix = o ns = \"urn:schemas-microsoft-comfficeffice\" /><o:p></o:p></span></span></p>
<p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"LINE-HEIGHT: 22pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-line-height-rule: exactly\" align=\"left\"><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312\">文<span lang=\"EN-US\">/</span>暗香疏影<span lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p></o:p></span></span></p>
<p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"LINE-HEIGHT: 22pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-line-height-rule: exactly\" align=\"left\"><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312\">谁忆风来幽涧鸣，清冷一夜西桥。</span></p>
<p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"LINE-HEIGHT: 22pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-line-height-rule: exactly\" align=\"left\"><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312\">碧波烟雨锁飞潮。疏红知我意，淡淡褪千娇。<span lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p></o:p></span></span></p>
<p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"LINE-HEIGHT: 22pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-line-height-rule: exactly\" align=\"left\"><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312\">世事觉来如旧梦，回眸唯叹云飘。</span></p>
<p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"LINE-HEIGHT: 22pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-line-height-rule: exactly\" align=\"left\"><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312\">几番惆怅几番消？独余三两事，隐入玉眉梢。<span lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p></o:p></span></span></p>
<p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"LINE-HEIGHT: 22pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-line-height-rule: exactly\" align=\"left\"><span lang=\"EN-US\" style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312\"><o:p> </p>
<p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"LINE-HEIGHT: 22pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-line-height-rule: exactly\" align=\"left\"><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312\">【临江仙】<span lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p></o:p></span></span></p>
<p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"LINE-HEIGHT: 22pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-line-height-rule: exactly\" align=\"left\"><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312\">文<span lang=\"EN-US\">/</span>暗香疏影<span lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p></o:p></span></span></p></o:p></span>
<p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"LINE-HEIGHT: 22pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-line-height-rule: exactly\" align=\"left\"><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312\">隐约江南飞蝶舞，亭亭枝上逍遥。</span></p>
<p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"LINE-HEIGHT: 22pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-line-height-rule: exactly\" align=\"left\"><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312\">春风影里弄芭蕉。韶光难解意，依旧笑阿娇。<span lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p></o:p></span></span></p>
<p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"LINE-HEIGHT: 22pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-line-height-rule: exactly\" align=\"left\"><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312\">人海擦肩成过客，前尘世事难了。</span></p>
<p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"LINE-HEIGHT: 22pt; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan; mso-line-height-rule: exactly\" align=\"left\"><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312\">闲来落笔锁重霄。此间无语处，梦里倚梅梢。<span lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p></o:p></span></span></p></div>
<p>婉约流畅，感怀佳作！</p>
作者: 啸天    时间: 2010-9-8 13:40
<div class=\"quote\"><b>以下是引用<i>一阳居士</i>在2010-9-8 8:30:58的发言：</b><br/><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312; FONT-SIZE: 14pt\">“谁忆风来幽涧鸣”，“鸣”字处为仄声，出律。</span> </div>
<p>\"清冷一夜西桥\",“冷”字出了，“前尘世事难了”，“了”字出了，“了”字像“明了”这一类形容词时作平声，其余了得，了解等副词或动词时均作仄声用。</p>
<p align=\"left\">几番惆怅几番消？独余三两事，隐入玉眉梢。</p>
<p align=\"left\">韶光难解意，依旧笑阿娇。</p>
<p align=\"left\">欣赏好句！问好暗香疏影。</p>
[此贴子已经被作者于2010-9-8 13:53:47编辑过]
作者: 暗香疏影    时间: 2010-9-8 22:19
<div class=\"quote\"><b>以下是引用<i>一阳居士</i>在2010-9-8 8:30:58的发言：</b><br/><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312\">“谁忆风来幽涧鸣”，“鸣”字处为仄声，出律。</span> </div>
<p><font face=\"楷体_GB2312\" size=\"3\">呵呵，谢谢！已改！没注意，不好意思！</font></p>
作者: 暗香疏影    时间: 2010-9-8 22:19
<div class=\"quote\"><b>以下是引用<i>一阳居士</i>在2010-9-8 8:31:35的发言：</b><br/>
<p>婉约流畅，感怀佳作！</p></div>
<p><font face=\"楷体_GB2312\" size=\"4\">呵呵，谢谢点评!</font></p>
作者: 暗香疏影    时间: 2010-9-8 22:22
<div class=\"quote\"><b>以下是引用<i>啸天</i>在2010-9-8 13:40:50的发言：</b><br/>
<p>\"清冷一夜西桥\",“冷”字出了，“前尘世事难了”，“了”字出了，“了”字像“明了”这一类形容词时作平声，其余了得，了解等副词或动词时均作仄声用。</p>
<p align=\"left\">几番惆怅几番消？独余三两事，隐入玉眉梢。</p>
<p align=\"left\">韶光难解意，依旧笑阿娇。</p>
<p align=\"left\">欣赏好句！问好暗香疏影。</p>
<div align=\"right\"><font color=\"#000066\">[此贴子已经被作者于2010-9-8 13:53:47编辑过]</font></div></div><font style=\"BACKGROUND-COLOR: #f9f9f9\">不好意思，冷为错别字，清泠！了字  平声  二萧词组，明～，好～（用在动词或形容词后）难为形容词！另了字为韵脚！谢谢你的点评！<br/></font>



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