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作者: 梅影 时间: 2010-9-29 13:55
标题: 七绝那时那月
伤心阕里秦淮月，
空忆青阶灯影痕。
水调琵琶成别语，
万丝碧柳曳黄昏。

作者: 荣西安 时间: 2010-9-29 17:48
标题: 论诗八首（依德松茶轩与梦璧、刘白杨二君韵）
整体好诗，味厚，但个人觉得结句如改成“
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ADDING-BOTTOM: 0px; LINE-HEIGHT: 21px; BORDER-RIGHT-WIDTH: 0px; LIST-STYLE-TYPE: none\" align=\"left\" 0px? 0px; normal; PADDING-TOP: BORDER-LEFT-WIDTH: WORD-BREAK: BORDER-BOTTOM-WIDTH: BORDER-TOP-WIDTH: WORD-WRAP: PADDING-RIGHT: PADDING-LEFT: 5px; 0px=\"0px\"><span style=\"WIDOWS: 2; TEXT-TRANSFORM: none; TEXT-INDENT: 0px; BORDER-COLLAPSE: separate; FONT: medium=\"medium\" =\" 0px? -webkit-text-stroke-width: auto; -webkit-text-size-adjust: none; -webkit-text-decorations-in-effect: 0px; -webkit-border-vertical-spacing: -webkit-border-horizontal-spacing: WORD-SPACING: normal; LETTER-SPACING: 2; ORPHANS: WHITE-SPACE: medium? WORD-BREAK: WORD-WRAP: simsun;><span style=\"WIDOWS: 2; TEXT-TRANSFORM: none; TEXT-INDENT: 0px; BORDER-COLLAPSE: separate; FONT: medium=\"medium\" =\" 0px? -webkit-text-stroke-width: auto; -webkit-text-size-adjust: none; -webkit-text-decorations-in-effect: 0px; -webkit-border-vertical-spacing: -webkit-border-horizontal-spacing: WORD-SPACING: normal; LETTER-SPACING: 2; ORPHANS: WHITE-SPACE: medium? WORD-BREAK: WORD-WRAP: simsun;>问好诗友，祝国庆佳节快乐！

作者: 梅影 时间: 2010-9-29 20:12
标题: 七绝那时那月
<div class=\"quote\">以下是引用荣西安在2010-9-29 17:48:48的发言： 整体好诗，味厚，但个人觉得结句如改成“
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<p style=\"

ADDING-BOTTOM: 0px; LINE-HEIGHT: 21px; BORDER-RIGHT-WIDTH: 0px; LIST-STYLE-TYPE: none\" align=\"left\" 0px? 0px; normal; PADDING-TOP: BORDER-LEFT-WIDTH: WORD-BREAK: BORDER-BOTTOM-WIDTH: BORDER-TOP-WIDTH: WORD-WRAP: PADDING-RIGHT: PADDING-LEFT: 5px; 0px=\"0px\"><span style=\"WIDOWS: 2; TEXT-TRANSFORM: none; TEXT-INDENT: 0px; BORDER-COLLAPSE: separate; FONT: medium=\"medium\" =\" normal; medium?=\" 0px? -webkit-text-stroke-width: auto; -webkit-text-size-adjust: none; -webkit-text-decorations-in-effect: 0px; -webkit-border-vertical-spacing: -webkit-border-horizontal-spacing: WORD-SPACING: normal; LETTER-SPACING: 2; ORPHANS: WHITE-SPACE: medium? WORD-BREAK: WORD-WRAP: simsun;><span style=\"WIDOWS: 2; TEXT-TRANSFORM: none; TEXT-INDENT: 0px; BORDER-COLLAPSE: separate; FONT: medium=\"medium\" =\" normal; medium?=\" 0px? -webkit-text-stroke-width: auto; -webkit-text-size-adjust: none; -webkit-text-decorations-in-effect: 0px; -webkit-border-vertical-spacing: -webkit-border-horizontal-spacing: WORD-SPACING: normal; LETTER-SPACING: 2; ORPHANS: WHITE-SPACE: medium? WORD-BREAK: WORD-WRAP: simsun;>问好诗友，祝国庆佳节快乐！</div>
好，其实换了好几个字都不合心意，没比较好。

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