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标题: [原创]一萼红.秋日感怀 [打印本页]
作者: 萧萧易水寒    时间: 2010-11-25 17:00
标题: [原创]一萼红.秋日感怀
<p style="MARGIN-TOP: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0cm" class="MsoNormal" 0cm="0cm" 0cm? 0pt?><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; COLOR: black; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new="New"></span><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-SIZE: 14pt" lang="EN-US"><?xml:namespace prefix = o ns = "urn:schemas-microsoft-comfficeffice" /><o:p><font face="宋体"></font></o:p></span> </p>
<p style="MARGIN-TOP: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0cm" class="MsoNormal" align="left" 0cm="0cm" 0cm? 0pt?><font size="4"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; COLOR: black; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new="New">立桥头，叹西风潇雨，一并洗清秋。</span><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-SIZE: 14pt" lang="EN-US"><o:p></o:p></span></font></p>
<p style="MARGIN-TOP: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0cm" class="MsoNormal" align="left" 0cm="0cm" 0cm? 0pt?><font size="4"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; COLOR: black; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new="New">瑟练寒江，残红逝远，天际目送归舟。</span><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-SIZE: 14pt" lang="EN-US"><o:p></o:p></span></font></p>
<p style="MARGIN-TOP: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0cm" class="MsoNormal" align="left" 0cm="0cm" 0cm? 0pt?><font size="4"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; COLOR: black; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new="New">再相望、八千云水，苍茫处、帆影怅悠悠。</span><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-SIZE: 14pt" lang="EN-US"><o:p></o:p></span></font></p>
<p style="TEXT-ALIGN: left; MARGIN-TOP: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0cm" class="MsoNormal" align="left" widow-orphan? mso-pagination: 0pt; 0cm="0cm" 0cm?><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 仿宋_GB2312; COLOR: black; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-hansi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体"><font size="4"><font face="宋体">雁阵横空，衡阳决意，疾过危楼。<span lang="EN-US"><o:p></o:p></span></font></font></span></p>
<p style="TEXT-ALIGN: left; MARGIN-TOP: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0cm" class="MsoNormal" align="left" widow-orphan? mso-pagination: 0pt; 0cm="0cm" 0cm?><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 仿宋_GB2312; COLOR: black; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-hansi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体" lang="EN-US"><o:p><font size="4" face="宋体"> </font></o:p></span></p>
<p style="MARGIN-TOP: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0cm" class="MsoNormal" align="left" 0cm="0cm" 0cm? 0pt?><font size="4"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; COLOR: black; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new="New">怯问斜阳无计，纵豪情万丈，梦也空留。</span><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-SIZE: 14pt" lang="EN-US"><o:p></o:p></span></font></p>
<p style="MARGIN-TOP: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0cm" class="MsoNormal" align="left" 0cm="0cm" 0cm? 0pt?><font size="4"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; COLOR: black; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new="New">辜负韶光，竹庐借酒，三杯两盏浇愁。</span><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-SIZE: 14pt" lang="EN-US"><o:p></o:p></span></font></p>
<p style="MARGIN-TOP: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0cm" class="MsoNormal" align="left" 0cm="0cm" 0cm? 0pt?><font size="4"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; COLOR: black; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new="New">岁荏苒、菱花霜鬓，金盔旧、铁甲枉春秋。</span><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-SIZE: 14pt" lang="EN-US"><o:p></o:p></span></font></p>
<p style="MARGIN-TOP: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0cm" class="MsoNormal" align="left" 0cm="0cm" 0cm? 0pt?><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体"><font size="4">笑挽弯弓无力，壮志休休。</font></span></p>
<p style="MARGIN-TOP: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0cm" class="MsoNormal" align="left" 0cm="0cm" 0cm? 0pt?><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体"></span><font size="4" face="宋体"> </font></p>
<p style="MARGIN-TOP: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0cm" class="MsoNormal" align="left" 0cm="0cm" 0cm? 0pt?><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体"><font size="4">注：钦定词谱词林正韵<span lang="EN-US"><o:p></o:p></span></font></span></p>
[此贴子已经被作者于2010-11-25 17:02:03编辑过]
作者: 笃志堂主    时间: 2010-11-25 20:28
触景生情，意绪苍茫。问好。
作者: 一阳居士    时间: 2010-11-26 09:51
上下片韵脚有两个秋字，重韵，大忌，换一个吧！问好!
作者: 江南之春    时间: 2010-11-26 10:09
<div class=\"quote\"><b>以下是引用<i>一阳居士</i>在2010-11-26 9:51:52的发言：</b><br/>上下片韵脚有两个秋字，重韵，大忌，换一个吧！问好! </div>
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<p>附议首版。余大好！</p>
作者: 砚浓    时间: 2010-11-26 11:31
楼主的词中总有几个“老”熟人的影子<img src=\"images/post/smile/dvbbs/em31.gif\" />，化用的蛮好
作者: 萧萧易水寒    时间: 2010-11-27 09:27
<p style=\"MARGIN-TOP: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0cm\" class=\"MsoNormal\" 0pt? 0cm=\"0cm\" 0cm?><font size=\"4\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; COLOR: black; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new=\"New\">一萼红</span><font face=\"宋体\"><span style=\"COLOR: black; FONT-SIZE: 14pt\" lang=\"EN-US\">.</span><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; COLOR: black; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new=\"New\">秋日怀远</span><span style=\"COLOR: black; FONT-SIZE: 14pt\" lang=\"EN-US\"><?xml:namespace prefix = o ns = \"urn:schemas-microsoft-comfficeffice\" /><o:p></o:p></span></font></font></p>
<p style=\"MARGIN-TOP: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0cm\" class=\"MsoNormal\" 0pt? 0cm=\"0cm\" 0cm?><font face=\"宋体\"></font><font size=\"4\"> </font></p>
<p style=\"MARGIN-TOP: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0cm\" class=\"MsoNormal\" 0pt? 0cm=\"0cm\" 0cm?><font size=\"4\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; COLOR: black; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new=\"New\">立桥头，叹西风潇雨，一并洗清秋。</span><span style=\"COLOR: black; FONT-SIZE: 14pt\" lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p></o:p></span></font></p>
<p style=\"MARGIN-TOP: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0cm\" class=\"MsoNormal\" 0pt? 0cm=\"0cm\" 0cm?><font size=\"4\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; COLOR: black; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new=\"New\">瑟练寒江，残红逝远，天际目送归舟。</span><span style=\"COLOR: black; FONT-SIZE: 14pt\" lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p></o:p></span></font></p>
<p style=\"MARGIN-TOP: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0cm\" class=\"MsoNormal\" 0pt? 0cm=\"0cm\" 0cm?><font size=\"4\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; COLOR: black; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new=\"New\">再相望、八千云水，苍茫处、帆影怅悠悠。</span><span style=\"COLOR: black; FONT-SIZE: 14pt\" lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p></o:p></span></font></p>
<p style=\"TEXT-ALIGN: left; MARGIN-TOP: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0cm\" class=\"MsoNormal\" align=\"left\" 0cm=\"0cm\" 0cm? 0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan?><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 仿宋_GB2312; COLOR: black; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-hansi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\"><font face=\"宋体\"><font size=\"4\">雁阵横空，衡阳决意，疾过铜楼。<span lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p></o:p></span></font></font></span></p>
<p style=\"TEXT-ALIGN: left; MARGIN-TOP: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0cm\" class=\"MsoNormal\" align=\"left\" 0cm=\"0cm\" 0cm? 0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan?><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 仿宋_GB2312; COLOR: black; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-hansi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\" lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p><font size=\"4\" face=\"宋体\"> </font></o:p></span></p>
<p style=\"MARGIN-TOP: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0cm\" class=\"MsoNormal\" 0pt? 0cm=\"0cm\" 0cm?><font size=\"4\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; COLOR: black; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new=\"New\">怯问斜阳无计，纵豪情万丈，梦也空留。</span><span style=\"COLOR: black; FONT-SIZE: 14pt\" lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p></o:p></span></font></p>
<p style=\"MARGIN-TOP: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0cm\" class=\"MsoNormal\" 0pt? 0cm=\"0cm\" 0cm?><font size=\"4\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; COLOR: black; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new=\"New\">辜负韶光，竹庐借酒，三杯两盏浇愁。</span><span style=\"COLOR: black; FONT-SIZE: 14pt\" lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p></o:p></span></font></p>
<p style=\"MARGIN-TOP: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0cm\" class=\"MsoNormal\" 0pt? 0cm=\"0cm\" 0cm?><font size=\"4\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; COLOR: black; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new=\"New\">岁荏苒、菱花霜鬓，金盔旧、铁甲叹休休。</span><span style=\"COLOR: black; FONT-SIZE: 14pt\" lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p></o:p></span></font></p>
<p style=\"MARGIN-TOP: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0cm\" class=\"MsoNormal\" 0pt? 0cm=\"0cm\" 0cm?><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\"><font size=\"4\">欲挽弯弓无力，壮志难酬。</font></span></p>
<p style=\"MARGIN-TOP: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0cm\" class=\"MsoNormal\" 0pt? 0cm=\"0cm\" 0cm?><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\"><font size=\"5\"></font></span> </p>
<p style=\"MARGIN-TOP: 0cm; MARGIN-LEFT: 0cm; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0cm\" class=\"MsoNormal\" 0pt? 0cm=\"0cm\" 0cm?><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\"><span lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p><font size=\"4\">稍作修改，请各位指教！</font></o:p></span></span></p>
[此贴子已经被作者于2010-11-27 9:27:45编辑过]
作者: 梅影点点    时间: 2010-11-28 10:33
见古味，情辞激烈，改后的更好一些，欣赏问好！



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