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标题: [原创]虞美人?赠春（新韵） [打印本页]

作者: 萧萧易水寒 时间: 2010-12-14 13:49
标题: [原创]虞美人?赠春（新韵）
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作者: 浪中行吟 时间: 2010-12-14 19:35
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作者: 砚浓 时间: 2010-12-14 21:37
<p>砚浓对新韵知之甚少。弱弱地问哈楼主，为何强把这一阕词标作新韵咧，“袭”在新韵里应该是平声吧？</p>

作者: 梅影点点 时间: 2010-12-15 07:54
两结俱好，激赏！

作者: 一阳居士 时间: 2010-12-15 10:33
<div class=\"quote\"><b>以下是引用<i>砚浓</i>在2010-12-14 21:37:02的发言：</b><br/>
<p>砚浓对新韵知之甚少。弱弱地问哈楼主，为何强把这一阕词标作新韵咧，“袭”在新韵里应该是平声吧？</p></div>
<p>砚浓所言极是，袭字新韵为平声，此处为仄声，构架松散，结构尚不严谨，需重构，个见！问候嘉友！</p>

作者: 文若水 时间: 2010-12-15 16:04
时令有点乱。

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