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标题: 五绝 七 夕 [打印本页]
作者: 松山居士    时间: 2009-10-6 15:33
标题: 五绝 七 夕
<span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 仿宋_GB2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 26.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 隶书; mso-hansi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA">     五绝</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 隶书; mso-bidi-font-size: 26.0pt; mso-hansi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-fareast-font-family: 仿宋_GB2312; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA"> </span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 仿宋_GB2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 26.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 隶书; mso-hansi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA">七</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 隶书; mso-bidi-font-size: 26.0pt; mso-hansi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-fareast-font-family: 仿宋_GB2312; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA"> </span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 仿宋_GB2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 26.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 隶书; mso-hansi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA">夕</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 隶书; mso-bidi-font-size: 26.0pt; mso-hansi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-fareast-font-family: 仿宋_GB2312; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA"> <br/></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 仿宋_GB2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 26.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 隶书; mso-hansi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA">又逢鹊桥会，细语话衷肠。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 隶书; mso-bidi-font-size: 26.0pt; mso-hansi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-fareast-font-family: 仿宋_GB2312; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA"> <br/></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 仿宋_GB2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 26.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 隶书; mso-hansi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA">泪雨天河阔</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 隶书; mso-bidi-font-size: 26.0pt; mso-hansi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-fareast-font-family: 仿宋_GB2312; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA">, </span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 仿宋_GB2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 26.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 隶书; mso-hansi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA">但求此日长。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 隶书; mso-bidi-font-size: 26.0pt; mso-hansi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-fareast-font-family: 仿宋_GB2312; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-CN; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA"> <br style="mso-special-character: line-break"/><br style="mso-special-character: line-break"/></span>
作者: 司马长风    时间: 2009-10-6 18:16
<font color=\"#0000ff\" size=\"4\">诗意甚佳。最后一句犯孤平，“但”字可改为“唯”。又，题为《七夕》，则“此日”宜改为“此夜”以切题。供参考。</font>
作者: 松山居士    时间: 2009-10-6 18:56
<p>改的很好，谢谢！</p>
<p>   </p>
<p> 五绝<span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 隶书; mso-bidi-font-size: 26.0pt; mso-hansi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-ansi-language: en-us; mso-fareast-language: zh-cn; mso-bidi-language: ar-sa; mso-fareast-font-family: 仿宋_gb2312\"> </span><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 仿宋_gb2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 26.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 隶书; mso-hansi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-ansi-language: en-us; mso-fareast-language: zh-cn; mso-bidi-language: ar-sa\">七</span><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 隶书; mso-bidi-font-size: 26.0pt; mso-hansi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-ansi-language: en-us; mso-fareast-language: zh-cn; mso-bidi-language: ar-sa; mso-fareast-font-family: 仿宋_gb2312\"> </span><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 仿宋_gb2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 26.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 隶书; mso-hansi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-ansi-language: en-us; mso-fareast-language: zh-cn; mso-bidi-language: ar-sa\">夕</span><span lang=\"EN-US\" style=\"FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 隶书; mso-bidi-font-size: 26.0pt; mso-hansi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-ansi-language: en-us; mso-fareast-language: zh-cn; mso-bidi-language: ar-sa; mso-fareast-font-family: 仿宋_gb2312\"> <br/></span><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 仿宋_gb2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 26.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 隶书; mso-hansi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-ansi-language: en-us; mso-fareast-language: zh-cn; mso-bidi-language: ar-sa\">又逢鹊桥会，细语话衷肠。</span><span lang=\"EN-US\" style=\"FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 隶书; mso-bidi-font-size: 26.0pt; mso-hansi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-ansi-language: en-us; mso-fareast-language: zh-cn; mso-bidi-language: ar-sa; mso-fareast-font-family: 仿宋_gb2312\"> <br/></span><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 仿宋_gb2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 26.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 隶书; mso-hansi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-ansi-language: en-us; mso-fareast-language: zh-cn; mso-bidi-language: ar-sa\">泪雨天河阔，</span><span lang=\"EN-US\" style=\"FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 隶书; mso-bidi-font-size: 26.0pt; mso-hansi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-ansi-language: en-us; mso-fareast-language: zh-cn; mso-bidi-language: ar-sa; mso-fareast-font-family: 仿宋_gb2312\">唯</span><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 仿宋_gb2312; mso-bidi-font-size: 26.0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 隶书; mso-hansi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-ansi-language: en-us; mso-fareast-language: zh-cn; mso-bidi-language: ar-sa\">求此夜长。</span><span lang=\"EN-US\" style=\"FONT-SIZE: 12pt; FONT-FAMILY: 隶书; mso-bidi-font-size: 26.0pt; mso-hansi-font-family: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-ansi-language: en-us; mso-fareast-language: zh-cn; mso-bidi-language: ar-sa; mso-fareast-font-family: 仿宋_gb2312\"> <br style=\"mso-special-character: line-break\"/></p></span>
作者: 桃花源主    时间: 2009-10-6 21:19
标题: [分享]警惕十二种有毒家常菜
好诗，欣赏了，问候朋友！
作者: 千堆雪冷    时间: 2009-10-6 21:38
<p>问好居士。</p>
<p>好一个求字，赞。</p>



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