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(原创)七律?《回首》
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作者:
柳浪闻莺
时间:
2009-11-6 01:49
标题:
(原创)七律?《回首》
(原创)七律?《回首》<span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: navy; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt"></span>
<p style="MARGIN: 0cm="0cm" 0cm="0cm" 0pt"><span style="COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New="New" Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New="New" Roman'">悬梁凿壁咏西风,走马兰台过客匆。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: navy; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt"></span></p>
<p style="MARGIN: 0cm="0cm" 0cm="0cm" 0pt"><span style="COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New="New" Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New="New" Roman'">白眼文章垂命苦,红唇锦帕尚雕工。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: navy; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt"></span></p>
<p style="MARGIN: 0cm="0cm" 0cm="0cm" 0pt"><span style="COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New="New" Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New="New" Roman'">雉鸡枉慕云中鹤,蝼蚁终非箭里虫。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: navy; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt"></span></p>
<p style="MARGIN: 0cm="0cm" 0cm="0cm" 0pt"><span style="COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New="New" Roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New="New" Roman'">回首骚坛堪一笑,唯怜拙笔未穷通。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: navy; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt"></span></p>
作者:
龙青
时间:
2009-11-6 20:05
唯怜拙笔未穷通。
作者:
司马长风
时间:
2009-11-6 22:12
<p><font size=\"4\">意佳。</font></p>
<p><font size=\"4\"><span style=\"COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\" Roman?? new=\"New\" ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New?>雉鸡枉慕云中鹤,蝼蚁终非箭里虫</span>---对仗甚工,但“<span style=\"COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\" Roman?? new=\"New\" ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New?>箭里虫</span><font face=\"宋体\" color=\"#000000\">”不大好懂,能否解释一下?</font></font></p>
<p><font face=\"宋体\" color=\"#000000\" size=\"4\">另,兰台,古为秘书省,掌图籍秘书,李商隐有“走马兰台类转蓬”之句,因李时任秘书正字,莫非阁下有类似经历?</font></p>
作者:
柳浪闻莺
时间:
2009-11-11 01:27
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ersonName>老师点评,箭里虫,北方人称高粱的杆为箭杆,当是男童的一种玩具</span><span lang=\"EN-US\" style=\"COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: Verdana; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\">--</span><span style=\"COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: Verdana; mso-hansi-font-family: Verdana; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\">弓箭。这里代指高粱杆。呵呵,有些牵强啊,但我好象在诗里看到过有人这样用过,具体记不清楚了。</span><span style=\"COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: Verdana; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\"> <span lang=\"EN-US\"><?xml:namespace prefix = o ns = \"urn:schemas-microsoft-com
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<p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan\" align=\"left\"><span style=\"COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\">另,兰台,古为秘书省,掌图籍秘书,李商隐有<span lang=\"EN-US\">“</span>走马兰台类转蓬<span lang=\"EN-US\">”</span>之句,因李时任秘书正字,莫非阁下有类似经历?回老师,是的,我当过机关的小秘书。哈哈,但可不是秘书省那么大的机关啊。</span><span lang=\"EN-US\" style=\"COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: Verdana; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan\" align=\"left\"><span style=\"COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\">觉原第二联不好,又修改了一下:<span lang=\"EN-US\"> <o:p></o:p></span></span></p>
<p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan\" align=\"left\"><span style=\"COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\" Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\" Roman\'; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\">悬梁凿壁咏西风,走马兰台过客匆。</span><span lang=\"EN-US\" style=\"COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: Verdana; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan\" align=\"left\"><span style=\"COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\" Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\" Roman\'; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\">自古文章垂坎坷,如今藻绘睐卑躬。</span><span lang=\"EN-US\" style=\"COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: Verdana; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan\" align=\"left\"><span style=\"COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\" Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\" Roman\'; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\">雉鸡枉慕云中鹤,蝼蚁终非箭里虫。</span><span lang=\"EN-US\" style=\"COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: Verdana; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan\" align=\"left\"><span style=\"COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\" Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\" Roman\'; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\">回首骚坛堪一笑,唯怜拙笔未穷通。</span><span lang=\"EN-US\" style=\"COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: Verdana; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class=\"MsoNormal\" style=\"TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-pagination: widow-orphan\" align=\"left\"><span lang=\"EN-US\" style=\"COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: Verdana; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\"> <o:p></o:p></span></p>
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作者:
柳浪闻莺
时间:
2009-11-15 17:11
谢谢司马长风,龙青,顽石老师点评。
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