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（原创）七律?《冬之韵-雪》
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作者:
柳浪闻莺
时间:
2009-11-22 00:39
标题:
（原创）七律?《冬之韵-雪》
（原创）七律?《冬之韵-雪》<span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: #003366; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt"></span>
<p style="MARGIN: 0cm="0cm" 0cm="0cm" 0pt"><span style="COLOR: #003366; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New="New" Roman'; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New="New" Roman'">北风一夜降龙鳞，省略骚人笔墨吟。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: #003366; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt"></span></p>
<p style="MARGIN: 0cm="0cm" 0cm="0cm" 0pt"><span style="COLOR: #003366; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New="New" Roman'; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New="New" Roman'">万里鹅毛天作画，千山素锦地铺银。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: #003366; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt"></span></p>
<p style="MARGIN: 0cm="0cm" 0cm="0cm" 0pt"><span style="COLOR: #003366; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New="New" Roman'; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New="New" Roman'">窗凌鬼斧欺霜叶，树挂神工傲俗尘。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: #003366; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt"></span></p>
<p style="MARGIN: 0cm="0cm" 0cm="0cm" 0pt"><span style="COLOR: #003366; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times New="New" Roman'; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times New="New" Roman'">白屋灯残听犬吠，前村疑有暗香魂。</span></p>
作者:
又是秋色
时间:
2009-11-23 09:31
欣赏，结句本意应该不错，但个感后半句还应更好。整体也欠点功夫，不妨再考虑一下。
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