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标题: (原创)七律?步韵柳下雪《冬梦》 [打印本页]
作者: 柳浪闻莺    时间: 2009-12-13 14:17
标题: (原创)七律?步韵柳下雪《冬梦》
  
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作者: 四海一棋    时间: 2009-12-13 14:52
赏读！冯塘当是冯唐笔误。“孤心可慰夕阳红。”似乎不是很贴切。<span lang=\"EN-US\" style=\"COLOR: navy; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt\"><?xml:namespace prefix = o ns = \"urn:schemas-microsoft-comfficeffice\" /><o:p></o:p></span>
作者: 白雪仙子    时间: 2009-12-13 18:08
赏读 问好！
作者: 柳浪闻莺    时间: 2009-12-13 19:42
谢谢四海老师点评，冯塘是错了，已经改正，孤心一联也作了修改。另第二句也做了修改。
作者: 柳浪闻莺    时间: 2009-12-13 19:46
标题: [原创]五言 七夕无语
谢谢白雪仙子版主点评，问安，祝周末快乐！
作者: 司马长风    时间: 2009-12-13 20:50
<p><font size=\"4\">整个看来，意思似乎有纠结、矛盾之处，如“莫叹、堪悲、可慰”之类。</font></p>
<p><font size=\"4\"><span style=\"COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\" new=\"New\" New? Roman?; mso-hansi-font-family: ?Times Roman??>少年未改冯唐志</span>---“冯唐”故事一般用作“咏叹年老滞沉下僚”之典。如“扬子解嘲徒自遣，冯唐已老复何论”（王维），“谢眺每篇堪讽诵，冯唐已老听吹嘘”、“垂白冯唐老，清秋宋玉悲”（杜甫），“此地含香从白首，冯唐何事怨明时”（杨巨源），“天子好年少，无人荐冯唐”（曹邺），“已似冯唐老，方知武子愚”（吴融），“未如何逊无佳句，若比冯唐是壮年”（郑谷）等等。此处曰“少年”，似不贴切。冯唐之志，志在为官，据《史记》，汉武时，举贤良，然冯已九十余，未能任事。王勃《滕王阁序》亦有“冯唐易老，李广难封”之句。</font></p>



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