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（原创）七绝?《落叶》
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作者:
柳浪闻莺
时间:
2009-12-29 03:42
标题:
（原创）七绝?《落叶》
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="COLOR: #333300; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new="New">惯看青山绿又黄，秋风一叶落残阳。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: #333300; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="COLOR: #333300; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new="New">书生自愧囊羞涩，借得松烟画炎凉。</span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="COLOR: #333300; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new="New"></span> </p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="COLOR: #333300; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new="New"></span><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: #333300; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt"><o:p>根据锄月版主指点，炎字出律，现修改如下：</p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="COLOR: #333300; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" Roman?? new="New" ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New?>惯看青山绿又黄，秋风一叶落残阳。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: #333300; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="COLOR: #333300; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" Roman?? new="New" ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New?>书生自愧囊羞涩，暂借松烟画雨凉。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="COLOR: #333300; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt"><o:p></o:p></span></p></o:p></span>
[此贴子已经被作者于2009-12-29 16:00:21编辑过]
作者:
锄月花樵
时间:
2009-12-29 10:27
欣赏。唯结句“炎”为平，此处该仄。
作者:
柳浪闻莺
时间:
2009-12-29 16:01
谢谢锄月版主指点，我修改一下。祝快乐！
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