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标题: （原创）七绝，步韵酬和春风琴竹《寄月》 [打印本页]
作者: 柳浪闻莺    时间: 2010-1-9 11:45
标题: （原创）七绝，步韵酬和春风琴竹《寄月》
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<p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: blue; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new="new"  roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times new="new"  roman'">（原创）七绝，步韵酬和《寄月》</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: blue" XMLANG="EN-US"> </span></p>
<p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: blue; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new="new"  roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times new="new"  roman'">逢君赐玉恰临池，正是家书落笔时。</span></p>
<p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: blue; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new="new"  roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times new="new"  roman'">忽见窗前明月色，焉能不惹我归思。</span></p>
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<p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: navy; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new="new"  roman'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Times new="new"  roman'">附春风琴竹原玉：</span></p>
<p><em><span lang="ZH" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: navy; FONT-STYLE: normal; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Arial; mso-hansi-font-family: Arial; mso-bidi-font-family: Arial; mso-fareast-language: ZH; mso-bidi-font-style: italic" XMLANG="ZH">特赠七绝一首：</span></em><em><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: navy; FONT-STYLE: normal; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Arial; mso-hansi-font-family: Arial; mso-bidi-font-family: Arial; mso-bidi-font-style: italic">《</span></em><em><span lang="ZH" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: navy; FONT-STYLE: normal; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Arial; mso-hansi-font-family: Arial; mso-bidi-font-family: Arial; mso-fareast-language: ZH; mso-bidi-font-style: italic" XMLANG="ZH">寄月</span></em><em><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: navy; FONT-STYLE: normal; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Arial; mso-hansi-font-family: Arial; mso-bidi-font-family: Arial; mso-bidi-font-style: italic">》</span></em></p>
<p><em><span lang="ZH" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: navy; FONT-STYLE: normal; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Arial; mso-hansi-font-family: Arial; mso-bidi-font-family: Arial; mso-fareast-language: ZH; mso-bidi-font-style: italic" XMLANG="ZH">一弯灵月掩云池，恰遇巴山夜雨时。</span></em></p>
<p><em><span lang="ZH" style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt; COLOR: navy; FONT-STYLE: normal; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: Arial; mso-hansi-font-family: Arial; mso-bidi-font-family: Arial; mso-fareast-language: ZH; mso-bidi-font-style: italic" XMLANG="ZH">既羡嘉陵青绿水，怡然欣享莫归思。</span></em></p></div>
作者: 又是秋色    时间: 2010-1-9 16:17
转的不错，欣赏。个别地方还不够精到，象“恰”与“正是”一个意思。个感结句还有提升空间。问好！
作者: 青山依旧    时间: 2010-1-9 17:30
角度不错,寄意不错,欣赏~
作者: 柳浪闻莺    时间: 2010-1-10 10:52
标题: 【仙吕宫 一半儿】友谊关有怀（飘红共赏）
谢谢秋版点评，我再认真考虑修改一下。祝周末快乐！
作者: 柳浪闻莺    时间: 2010-1-10 10:54
谢谢青山依旧老师点评鼓励，问好！祝周末快乐！



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