七绝 那时那月

梅影

伤心阕里秦淮月，
空忆青阶灯影痕。
水调琵琶成别语，
万丝碧柳曳黄昏。

荣西安

整体好诗，味厚，但个人觉得结句如改成“
<p style=\"ADDING-BOTTOM: 0px; LINE-HEIGHT: 21px; BORDER-RIGHT-WIDTH: 0px; LIST-STYLE-TYPE: none\" align=\"left\" 0px? 0px; normal; PADDING-TOP: BORDER-LEFT-WIDTH: WORD-BREAK: BORDER-BOTTOM-WIDTH: BORDER-TOP-WIDTH: WORD-WRAP: PADDING-RIGHT: PADDING-LEFT: 5px; 0px=\"0px\"><span style=\"WIDOWS: 2; TEXT-TRANSFORM: none; TEXT-INDENT: 0px; BORDER-COLLAPSE: separate; FONT: medium=\"medium\"  =\" 0px? -webkit-text-stroke-width: auto; -webkit-text-size-adjust: none; -webkit-text-decorations-in-effect: 0px; -webkit-border-vertical-spacing: -webkit-border-horizontal-spacing: WORD-SPACING: normal; LETTER-SPACING: 2; ORPHANS: WHITE-SPACE: medium? WORD-BREAK: WORD-WRAP: simsun;><span style=\"LINE-HEIGHT: 24px; FONT-FAMILY: simsun, 宋体, sans-serif; WORD-WRAP: normal; FONT-SIZE: 16px; WORD-BREAK: normal\"><span style=\"WIDOWS: 2; TEXT-TRANSFORM: none; TEXT-INDENT: 0px; BORDER-COLLAPSE: separate; FONT: medium=\"medium\"  =\" 0px? -webkit-text-stroke-width: auto; -webkit-text-size-adjust: none; -webkit-text-decorations-in-effect: 0px; -webkit-border-vertical-spacing: -webkit-border-horizontal-spacing: WORD-SPACING: normal; LETTER-SPACING: 2; ORPHANS: WHITE-SPACE: medium? WORD-BREAK: WORD-WRAP: simsun;><span style=\"LINE-HEIGHT: 21px; FONT-FAMILY: simsun, 宋体, sans-serif; WORD-WRAP: normal; FONT-SIZE: 14px; WORD-BREAK: normal\"><font style=\"LINE-HEIGHT: 24px; FONT-FAMILY: 幼圆; WORD-WRAP: normal; FONT-SIZE: 16px; WORD-BREAK: normal\"><font style=\"LINE-HEIGHT: 24px; WORD-WRAP: normal; WORD-BREAK: normal\"><font style=\"LINE-HEIGHT: 24px; WORD-WRAP: normal; WORD-BREAK: normal\" color=\"#000000\" size=\"4\">浆声灯影没黄昏。”也许更好。</font></font></font></span></span></span></span></p>
<p style=\"ADDING-BOTTOM: 0px; LINE-HEIGHT: 21px; BORDER-RIGHT-WIDTH: 0px; LIST-STYLE-TYPE: none\" align=\"left\" 0px? 0px; normal; PADDING-TOP: BORDER-LEFT-WIDTH: WORD-BREAK: BORDER-BOTTOM-WIDTH: BORDER-TOP-WIDTH: WORD-WRAP: PADDING-RIGHT: PADDING-LEFT: 5px; 0px=\"0px\"><span style=\"WIDOWS: 2; TEXT-TRANSFORM: none; TEXT-INDENT: 0px; BORDER-COLLAPSE: separate; FONT: medium=\"medium\"  =\" 0px? -webkit-text-stroke-width: auto; -webkit-text-size-adjust: none; -webkit-text-decorations-in-effect: 0px; -webkit-border-vertical-spacing: -webkit-border-horizontal-spacing: WORD-SPACING: normal; LETTER-SPACING: 2; ORPHANS: WHITE-SPACE: medium? WORD-BREAK: WORD-WRAP: simsun;><span style=\"LINE-HEIGHT: 24px; FONT-FAMILY: simsun, 宋体, sans-serif; WORD-WRAP: normal; FONT-SIZE: 16px; WORD-BREAK: normal\"><span style=\"WIDOWS: 2; TEXT-TRANSFORM: none; TEXT-INDENT: 0px; BORDER-COLLAPSE: separate; FONT: medium=\"medium\"  =\" 0px? -webkit-text-stroke-width: auto; -webkit-text-size-adjust: none; -webkit-text-decorations-in-effect: 0px; -webkit-border-vertical-spacing: -webkit-border-horizontal-spacing: WORD-SPACING: normal; LETTER-SPACING: 2; ORPHANS: WHITE-SPACE: medium? WORD-BREAK: WORD-WRAP: simsun;><span style=\"LINE-HEIGHT: 21px; FONT-FAMILY: simsun, 宋体, sans-serif; WORD-WRAP: normal; FONT-SIZE: 14px; WORD-BREAK: normal\"><font size=\"4\" face=\"幼圆\">问好诗友，祝国庆佳节快乐！</font></span></span></span></span></p>

梅影

<div class=\"quote\"><b>以下是引用<i>荣西安</i>在2010-9-29 17:48:48的发言：</b><br/>整体好诗，味厚，但个人觉得结句如改成“
<p style=\"ADDING-BOTTOM: 0px; LINE-HEIGHT: 21px; BORDER-RIGHT-WIDTH: 0px; LIST-STYLE-TYPE: none\" align=\"left\" 0px? 0px; normal; PADDING-TOP: BORDER-LEFT-WIDTH: WORD-BREAK: BORDER-BOTTOM-WIDTH: BORDER-TOP-WIDTH: WORD-WRAP: PADDING-RIGHT: PADDING-LEFT: 5px; 0px=\"0px\"><span style=\"WIDOWS: 2; TEXT-TRANSFORM: none; TEXT-INDENT: 0px; BORDER-COLLAPSE: separate; FONT: medium=\"medium\"  =\" normal; medium?=\" 0px? -webkit-text-stroke-width: auto; -webkit-text-size-adjust: none; -webkit-text-decorations-in-effect: 0px; -webkit-border-vertical-spacing: -webkit-border-horizontal-spacing: WORD-SPACING: normal; LETTER-SPACING: 2; ORPHANS: WHITE-SPACE: medium? WORD-BREAK: WORD-WRAP: simsun;><span style=\" WORD-BREAK: WORD-WRAP: normal? 16px; FONT-SIZE: sans-serif; 宋体, simsun, FONT-FAMILY: 24px; LINE-HEIGHT:><span style=\"WIDOWS: 2; TEXT-TRANSFORM: none; TEXT-INDENT: 0px; BORDER-COLLAPSE: separate; FONT: medium=\"medium\"  =\" normal; medium?=\" 0px? -webkit-text-stroke-width: auto; -webkit-text-size-adjust: none; -webkit-text-decorations-in-effect: 0px; -webkit-border-vertical-spacing: -webkit-border-horizontal-spacing: WORD-SPACING: normal; LETTER-SPACING: 2; ORPHANS: WHITE-SPACE: medium? WORD-BREAK: WORD-WRAP: simsun;><span style=\" WORD-BREAK: WORD-WRAP: normal? FONT-SIZE: sans-serif; 宋体, simsun, FONT-FAMILY: LINE-HEIGHT: 14px; 21px;><font style=\"LINE-HEIGHT: 24px; FONT-FAMILY: 幼圆; WORD-WRAP: normal; FONT-SIZE: 16px; WORD-BREAK: normal\"><font style=\"LINE-HEIGHT: 24px; WORD-WRAP: normal; WORD-BREAK: normal\"><font style=\"LINE-HEIGHT: 24px; WORD-WRAP: normal; WORD-BREAK: normal\" color=\"#000000\" size=\"4\">浆声灯影没黄昏。”也许更好。</font></font></font></span></span></span></span></p>
<p style=\"ADDING-BOTTOM: 0px; LINE-HEIGHT: 21px; BORDER-RIGHT-WIDTH: 0px; LIST-STYLE-TYPE: none\" align=\"left\" 0px? 0px; normal; PADDING-TOP: BORDER-LEFT-WIDTH: WORD-BREAK: BORDER-BOTTOM-WIDTH: BORDER-TOP-WIDTH: WORD-WRAP: PADDING-RIGHT: PADDING-LEFT: 5px; 0px=\"0px\"><span style=\"WIDOWS: 2; TEXT-TRANSFORM: none; TEXT-INDENT: 0px; BORDER-COLLAPSE: separate; FONT: medium=\"medium\"  =\" normal; medium?=\" 0px? -webkit-text-stroke-width: auto; -webkit-text-size-adjust: none; -webkit-text-decorations-in-effect: 0px; -webkit-border-vertical-spacing: -webkit-border-horizontal-spacing: WORD-SPACING: normal; LETTER-SPACING: 2; ORPHANS: WHITE-SPACE: medium? WORD-BREAK: WORD-WRAP: simsun;><span style=\" WORD-BREAK: WORD-WRAP: normal? 16px; FONT-SIZE: sans-serif; 宋体, simsun, FONT-FAMILY: 24px; LINE-HEIGHT:><span style=\"WIDOWS: 2; TEXT-TRANSFORM: none; TEXT-INDENT: 0px; BORDER-COLLAPSE: separate; FONT: medium=\"medium\"  =\" normal; medium?=\" 0px? -webkit-text-stroke-width: auto; -webkit-text-size-adjust: none; -webkit-text-decorations-in-effect: 0px; -webkit-border-vertical-spacing: -webkit-border-horizontal-spacing: WORD-SPACING: normal; LETTER-SPACING: 2; ORPHANS: WHITE-SPACE: medium? WORD-BREAK: WORD-WRAP: simsun;><span style=\" WORD-BREAK: WORD-WRAP: normal? FONT-SIZE: sans-serif; 宋体, simsun, FONT-FAMILY: LINE-HEIGHT: 14px; 21px;><font size=\"4\" face=\"幼圆\">问好诗友，祝国庆佳节快乐！</font></span></span></span></span></p></div>
<p>好，其实换了好几个字都不合心意，没比较好。</p>