[原创]喝火令?七夕

杏花雨

  
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new="New"><font size="4">碧海喧灵鹊，</font></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new="New"><font size="4">青天幻瑞霞。</font></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new="New"><font size="4">金风玉露作肴佳。</font></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new="New"><font size="4">一盏相思沉醉，</font></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new="New"><font size="4">浓酒淡成茶。</font></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new="New"><font size="4">旧恨云间水，</font></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new="New"><font size="4">新愁指上沙</font></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new="New"><font size="4">只将泪作萧萧雨</font></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new="New"><font size="4">润了红尘，润了陌边花，</font></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new="New"><font size="4">润了绮窗岑寂，素手弄琵琶。</font></span></p>

[此贴子已经被隔水伊人于2010-8-18 9:30:39编辑过]

落雁公主

<p>对仗处处理得不错 三个叠句也不错 深得喝火令的要领 个别处再斟酌一下就好了<img src=\"images/post/smile/dvbbs/em23.gif\" /></p>

隔水伊人

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<p><font size=\"4\">碧海喧灵鹊，</font><font size=\"4\">青天幻瑞霞。</font><font size=\"4\">金风玉露作肴佳。</font><font size=\"4\">一盏相思沉醉，</font><font size=\"4\">浓酒淡成茶。</font></p>
<p><font size=\"4\">旧恨云间水，</font><font size=\"4\">新愁指上沙</font><font size=\"4\">只将泪作萧萧雨</font><font size=\"4\">润了红尘，润了陌边花，</font><font size=\"4\">润了绮窗岑寂，素手弄琵琶。</font></p></div></td></tr></tbody></table>
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<p><font size=\"4\">整篇见情思，构思奇特！我替楼主把字放大了些，以便阅读。</font></p>

[此贴子已经被作者于2010-8-18 9:33:16编辑过]