[原创]五绝--别

墨韵

<p><font class="Apple-style-span" face="楷体_GB2312" color="#0033ff"><span class="Apple-style-span" style="FONT-SIZE: x-large; LINE-HEIGHT: 20px"><b></b></span></font> </p>
<p><font class="Apple-style-span" face="楷体_GB2312" color="#0033ff"><span class="Apple-style-span" style="FONT-SIZE: x-large; LINE-HEIGHT: 20px"><b>归途心意惘，</b></span></font><font class="Apple-style-span" face="楷体_GB2312" color="#0033ff"><span class="Apple-style-span" style="FONT-SIZE: x-large; LINE-HEIGHT: 20px"><b>一步一离殇。</b></span></font></p>
<p><font class="Apple-style-span" face="楷体_GB2312" color="#0033ff"><span class="Apple-style-span" style="FONT-SIZE: x-large; LINE-HEIGHT: 20px"><b></b></span></font> </p>
<p><font class="Apple-style-span" face="楷体_GB2312" color="#0033ff"><span class="Apple-style-span" style="FONT-SIZE: x-large; LINE-HEIGHT: 20px"><b>怎掩别愁绪，</b></span></font><font class="Apple-style-span" face="楷体_GB2312" color="#0033ff"><span class="Apple-style-span" style="FONT-SIZE: x-large; LINE-HEIGHT: 20px"><b>难收友聚香。</b></span></font></p>

[此贴子已经被司马长风于2010-9-25 21:15:29编辑过]

司马长风

<font color=\"#0000ff\" size=\"3\">“惘”在此应是“迷惘”之意，但是单独用总觉不妥。“难收友聚香”不知何意？</font>

啸天

问好墨韵，欣赏这首五绝诗，前三联贴切，就是个人感觉“友聚香”有些不自然。

墨韵

<div class=\"quote\"><b>以下是引用<i>司马长风</i>在2010-9-25 21:17:41的发言：</b><br/><font color=\"#0000ff\" size=\"3\">“惘”在此应是“迷惘”之意，但是单独用总觉不妥。“难收友聚香”不知何意？</font> </div>
<p>最初是惘惘，难收友聚香是很难收起朋友们在一起欢聚的场面！这首诗是描写与朋友们聚会后恋恋不舍的分别，独自返程的忧伤心情！</p>