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江湖散客

<font color="#008000"><strong><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px">       偶见《梅园全景图》上题诗</font> </strong></font>
<p><strong><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#006600">不通平仄亦题诗， <wbr> 更把荆条当柳枝。</font></strong></p>
<p><strong><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#006600">沉默丹青羞吐语， <wbr> 名家是否要三思？</font></strong></p>
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<p><span><strong><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#006600"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr>      听夫子高论</font></strong></span></p>
<p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt"><strong><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#006600">聆听高论暗诚惶， <wbr> 压韵方知未过唐。</font></strong></span></p>
<p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt"><strong><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#006600">孔子伤心冤改姓， <wbr> 阎罗殿上诉端详。</font></strong></span></p>
<p><font color="#006600"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" 12.0pt? mso-bidi-font-size: Ar-sA; mso-bidi-language: ZH-Cn; mso-fareast-language: en-Us; mso-ansi-language: roman?; new="new" ?Times mso-bidi-font-family: 1.0pt; mso-font-kerning: mso-hansi-font-family: new?><strong>高论：</strong>某君在我家中当众谈论“孔子不姓孔，姓子。”</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 'Times new=" XMLANG="EN-US" 12.0pt? mso-bidi-font-size: Ar-sA; mso-bidi-language: ZH-Cn; mso-fareast-language: en-Us; mso-ansi-language: roman?; 1.0pt; mso-font-kerning: new? 宋体; mso-fareast-font-family:><span style="mso-spacerun: yes"><font face="Times new=" Roman? New?> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr></font></span></span></font> <font color="#006600"><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 'Times new=" XMLANG="EN-US" 12.0pt? mso-bidi-font-size: Ar-sA; mso-bidi-language: ZH-Cn; mso-fareast-language: en-Us; mso-ansi-language: roman?; 1.0pt; mso-font-kerning: new? 宋体; mso-fareast-font-family:><span style="mso-spacerun: yes"><font face="Times new=" Roman? New?> <wbr></font></span></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" 12.0pt? mso-bidi-font-size: Ar-sA; mso-bidi-language: ZH-Cn; mso-fareast-language: en-Us; mso-ansi-language: roman?; new="new" ?Times mso-bidi-font-family: 1.0pt; mso-font-kerning: mso-hansi-font-family: new?><strong>“压韵”句：</strong>“压韵”同“押韵”。见《古代汉语》、《中国诗学》、《辞源》等。某君却说只有“押韵”，没有“压韵”，用“压韵”是错的。</span></font></p>
<p><font color="#006600"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" 12.0pt? mso-bidi-font-size: Ar-sA; mso-bidi-language: ZH-Cn; mso-fareast-language: en-Us; mso-ansi-language: roman?; new="new" ?Times mso-bidi-font-family: 1.0pt; mso-font-kerning: mso-hansi-font-family: new?></span></font> </p>
<p><font color="#006600"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" 12.0pt? mso-bidi-font-size: Ar-sA; mso-bidi-language: ZH-Cn; mso-fareast-language: en-Us; mso-ansi-language: roman?; new="new" ?Times mso-bidi-font-family: 1.0pt; mso-font-kerning: mso-hansi-font-family: new?></span></font> <wbr></p>
<p><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#006600"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr>    未料嘉兴变“吴头”</font></span></b></p>
<p><span><strong><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#006600">风雅高吟笔万钧， <wbr> 半瓶新醋半瓶空。</font></strong></span></p>
<p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 12pt"><strong><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#006600">吴头飞到南湖里， <wbr> 偏道羞颜是酒红。</font></strong></span></p>
<p><font color="#006600"><strong>吴头：</strong>指今江西省。江西位于吴地上游，楚地下游，如首尾相衔接，故称吴头楚尾。某君在其《浪淘沙》词中，将浙江省嘉兴市的南湖说成是“吴头”。</font></p>
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<p><b><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#006600"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr>       自立碑廊</font></b></p>
<p><strong><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#006600">自书自刻欲流芳， <wbr> 空把萤光当火光。</font></strong></p>
<p><strong><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#006600">无字皇碑君不解， <wbr> 先宗地下也悲伤。</font></strong></p>
<p><font color="#006600"><strong>碑廊：</strong>据说某诗词组织整体不懂诗词格律，却又以格律诗的外表形式写诗。并自行筹款，将其写的所谓“诗”刻在许多石碑上，</font><font color="#006600">意欲流芳千古。 <wbr> <wbr> 无字皇碑：即无字碑。相传秦始皇、武则天皆立过无字碑，自己的是非功过让后人评定。后作虚有仪表而不善文者的谐称。 <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> </font></p>
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<p><b><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#006600"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr>      致剽窃者</font></b></p>
<p><strong><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#006600">顺手牵羊免运筹， <wbr> 移花接木也丰收。</font></strong></p>
<p><strong><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#006600">曾闻二句三年得， <wbr> 试问先生可泪流？</font></strong></p>
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<p><b><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#006600"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr>   <wbr>娱乐场所轿车遮住车牌</font></b></p>
<p><strong><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#006600">一顶乌纱敌万钧， <wbr> 寻常转动小乾坤。</font></strong></p>
<p><strong><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#006600">轿车灯火章台路， <wbr> 醉倒香风只怨春。</font></strong></p>
<p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" mso-bidi-language: ZH-Cn; mso-fareast-language: en-Us; mso-ansi-language: roman?; new="new" ?Times mso-bidi-font-family: 1.0pt; mso-font-kerning: mso-hansi-font-family: new? Ar-sA?><font color="#006600"><strong>怨春</strong>：怨春色太浓（美女太多情）。</font></span></p>
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<p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" mso-bidi-language: ZH-Cn; mso-fareast-language: en-Us; mso-ansi-language: roman?; new="new" ?Times mso-bidi-font-family: 1.0pt; mso-font-kerning: mso-hansi-font-family: new? Ar-sA?><b><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#006600"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> 重读《鲁迅旧诗笺注》</font></b></span></p>
<p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" mso-bidi-language: ZH-Cn; mso-fareast-language: en-Us; mso-ansi-language: roman?; new="new" ?Times mso-bidi-font-family: 1.0pt; mso-font-kerning: mso-hansi-font-family: new? Ar-sA?><strong><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#006600">千夫冷对且横眉， <wbr> 莫叹狼烟驾鹤归。</font></strong></span></p>
<p><strong><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#006600">不见咸阳坑火里， <wbr> 幸无野草一摊灰。</font></strong></p>
<p><font color="#006600"><strong>野草：</strong>书名。是鲁迅一本杂文集。借喻鲁迅作品风格和鲁迅性格。以鲁迅威武不屈的耿直性格和笔锋，若活到“反右派斗争”时，会不会被戴上“右派”的桂冠就很难说了。</font></p>
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<p><b><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#006600"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr>生辰前夕读《秦始皇本纪》</font></b></p>
<p><strong><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#006600">六十生辰一岁虚， <wbr> 咸阳北望祖龙居。</font></strong></p>
<p><strong><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#006600">阿房眼看成灰烬， <wbr> 可笑空藏十万舆。</font></strong></p>
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<p><b><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#006600"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr>      所谓“自度曲”</font></b></p>
<p><strong><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#006600">自度新声少细量， <wbr> 千年忘却失宫商。</font></strong></p>
<p><strong><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#006600">邯郸学步羞邻里， <wbr> 落得东施笑柄长。</font></strong></p>
<p><font color="#006600"><strong><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" mso-bidi-language: ZH-Cn; mso-fareast-language: en-Us; mso-ansi-language: roman?; new="new" ?Times mso-bidi-font-family: 1.0pt; mso-font-kerning: mso-hansi-font-family: new? Ar-sA?>“自度</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 'Times new=" XMLANG="EN-US" Ar-sA; mso-bidi-language: ZH-Cn; mso-fareast-language: en-Us; mso-ansi-language: roman?; 1.0pt; mso-font-kerning: new? mso-fareast-font-family: 宋体?>(du</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times new=" mso-bidi-language: ZH-Cn; mso-fareast-language: en-Us; mso-ansi-language: roman?; new? Ar-sA?>ó 夺</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 'Times new=" XMLANG="EN-US" Ar-sA; mso-bidi-language: ZH-Cn; mso-fareast-language: en-Us; mso-ansi-language: roman?; 1.0pt; mso-font-kerning: new? mso-fareast-font-family: 宋体?>)</span></strong><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" mso-bidi-language: ZH-Cn; mso-fareast-language: en-Us; mso-ansi-language: roman?; new="new" ?Times mso-bidi-font-family: 1.0pt; mso-font-kerning: mso-hansi-font-family: new? Ar-sA?><strong>”句</strong>：今有少数人见古人作《自度曲》，竟盲目模仿，却不知古人作自度曲时，词调尚未失传，作者又精通乐理，为当时演唱而作。度，自定。新声，新词。少细量，欠考虑。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 'Times new=" XMLANG="EN-US" Ar-sA; mso-bidi-language: ZH-Cn; mso-fareast-language: en-Us; mso-ansi-language: roman?; 1.0pt; mso-font-kerning: new? mso-fareast-font-family: 宋体?><span style="mso-spacerun: yes"><font face="Times new=" Roman? New?> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr></font></span></span> <span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" mso-bidi-language: ZH-Cn; mso-fareast-language: en-Us; mso-ansi-language: roman?; new="new" ?Times mso-bidi-font-family: 1.0pt; mso-font-kerning: mso-hansi-font-family: new? Ar-sA?>“千年”句：词调（牌）的唱法自南宋末年就逐渐失传了。</span></font></p>
<p><font color="#006600"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" mso-bidi-language: ZH-Cn; mso-fareast-language: en-Us; mso-ansi-language: roman?; new="new" ?Times mso-bidi-font-family: 1.0pt; mso-font-kerning: mso-hansi-font-family: new? Ar-sA?></span></font> </p>
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<p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" mso-bidi-language: ZH-Cn; mso-fareast-language: en-Us; mso-ansi-language: roman?; new="new" ?Times mso-bidi-font-family: 1.0pt; mso-font-kerning: mso-hansi-font-family: new? Ar-sA?><b><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#006600"> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr>读《看〈孙悟空三打白骨精〉》</font></b></span></p>
<p><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" mso-bidi-language: ZH-Cn; mso-fareast-language: en-Us; mso-ansi-language: roman?; new="new" ?Times mso-bidi-font-family: 1.0pt; mso-font-kerning: mso-hansi-font-family: new? Ar-sA?><strong><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#006600">才高八斗谓文豪， <wbr> 五柳黄泉笑折腰。</font></strong></span></p>
<p><strong><font style="FONT-SIZE: 20px" color="#006600">欲剐僧肉迎圣意， <wbr>  惜君有负紫狼毫。</font></strong></p>
<p><font color="#006600"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" mso-bidi-language: ZH-Cn; mso-fareast-language: en-Us; mso-ansi-language: roman?; new="new" ?Times mso-bidi-font-family: 1.0pt; mso-font-kerning: mso-hansi-font-family: new? Ar-sA?>看孙悟空三打白骨精：是郭沫若</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 'Times new=" XMLANG="EN-US" Ar-sA; mso-bidi-language: ZH-Cn; mso-fareast-language: en-Us; mso-ansi-language: roman?; 1.0pt; mso-font-kerning: new? mso-fareast-font-family: 宋体?>1961</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" mso-bidi-language: ZH-Cn; mso-fareast-language: en-Us; mso-ansi-language: roman?; new="new" ?Times mso-bidi-font-family: 1.0pt; mso-font-kerning: mso-hansi-font-family: new? Ar-sA?>年</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 'Times new=" XMLANG="EN-US" Ar-sA; mso-bidi-language: ZH-Cn; mso-fareast-language: en-Us; mso-ansi-language: roman?; 1.0pt; mso-font-kerning: new? mso-fareast-font-family: 宋体?>10</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" mso-bidi-language: ZH-Cn; mso-fareast-language: en-Us; mso-ansi-language: roman?; new="new" ?Times mso-bidi-font-family: 1.0pt; mso-font-kerning: mso-hansi-font-family: new? Ar-sA?>月，在北京观看浙江省绍剧团所演《孙悟空三打白骨精》后，所写的一首七律。并呈送毛泽东，谁知毛泽东看到“千刀当剐唐僧肉”一句时，颇为不满，于同年</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 'Times new=" XMLANG="EN-US" Ar-sA; mso-bidi-language: ZH-Cn; mso-fareast-language: en-Us; mso-ansi-language: roman?; 1.0pt; mso-font-kerning: new? mso-fareast-font-family: 宋体?>11</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" mso-bidi-language: ZH-Cn; mso-fareast-language: en-Us; mso-ansi-language: roman?; new="new" ?Times mso-bidi-font-family: 1.0pt; mso-font-kerning: mso-hansi-font-family: new? Ar-sA?>月</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 'Times new=" XMLANG="EN-US" Ar-sA; mso-bidi-language: ZH-Cn; mso-fareast-language: en-Us; mso-ansi-language: roman?; 1.0pt; mso-font-kerning: new? mso-fareast-font-family: 宋体?>17</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" mso-bidi-language: ZH-Cn; mso-fareast-language: en-Us; mso-ansi-language: roman?; new="new" ?Times mso-bidi-font-family: 1.0pt; mso-font-kerning: mso-hansi-font-family: new? Ar-sA?>日写了一首《七律?和郭沫若同志》，指出“僧是愚氓犹可训”，批评了郭的观点。郭读毛诗后，立即向毛明确表示愿意接受毛的点拨，并说受到很大教育。当天就用毛泽东诗的原韵，又和了一首。改变了原诗的立场观点，以迎合毛泽东的心意。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 'Times new=" XMLANG="EN-US" Ar-sA; mso-bidi-language: ZH-Cn; mso-fareast-language: en-Us; mso-ansi-language: roman?; 1.0pt; mso-font-kerning: new? mso-fareast-font-family: 宋体?><span style="mso-spacerun: yes"><font face="Times new=" Roman? New?> <wbr> <wbr></font></span></span></font></p>

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锄月花樵

诗分美刺，此组题材甚好，有现实意义，其寓意非一般风花雪月题材所能及，若拿捏刻画再精警含蓄些则更佳。欢迎并问好新朋友！

紫嫣郡主

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一行白鹭

一组讽喻诗甚好，问好新朋友。

青山依旧

<p><font face=\"Times New=\"New\"  Roman\">不错,</font></p>

司马长风

<p><font color=\"#0000ff\" size=\"4\">一丛好刺。</font></p>
<p><font color=\"#0000ff\" size=\"4\">当今诗坛，泥沙俱下，乱象丛生，不免为人所诟病。广大诗词爱好者孜孜不倦，弘扬传统文化，修心怡情，自当鼓励。而某些有权有势者，也窜进诗坛，鼓捣出一些“四不象”的东西，流毒甚广，为害甚大。最恶心者，莫过于山东省作协副主席王兆山之流，其于汶川地震之后的2008年6月6日在山东《齐鲁晚报》A26版“青未了”副刊发表“词二首”，其中之一为所谓“江城子”有句“十三亿人共一哭，纵做鬼，也幸福”。姑且不论其平仄韵律之误，单就其内容来说，媚官矫情之态令人作呕。难怪有人愤而和之：“显示器前网友怒，恨不能，碎汝骨！”诗坛需要正来清源，树正气，煞歪风，才有利于诗词的健康发展。而作为全国性诗词组织中华诗词学会，反而成为祸乱之源，可悲复可叹也。噫！</font></p>

白雪仙子

<div class=\"quote\"><b>以下是引用<i>锄月花樵</i>在2009-12-14 14:14:03的发言：</b><br/>诗分美刺，此组题材甚好，有现实意义，其寓意非一般风花雪月题材所能及，若拿捏刻画再精警含蓄些则更佳。欢迎并问好新朋友！ </div>
<p>附议，学习问好！</p>

馨月

<p><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 10.5pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\" new=\"new\" mso-hansi-font-family: ?Times new? mso-font-kerning: 1.0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: roman?; mso-ansi-language: en-Us; mso-fareast-language: ZH-Cn; mso-bidi-language: Ar-sA?><strong><font style=\"FONT-SIZE: 20px\" color=\"#006600\">才高八斗谓文豪， <wbr> 五柳黄泉笑折腰。</font></strong></span></p>
<p><strong><font style=\"FONT-SIZE: 20px\" color=\"#006600\">欲剐僧肉迎圣意， <wbr>  惜君有负紫狼毫。</font></strong></p>
<p>嘿,也不能太刻薄了.</p>

江湖散客

感谢各位雅评！周日问好！