（原创）七绝?《送别》

柳浪闻莺

  
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柳浪闻莺

谢谢湘弦总版指点，下次就明白了，我再修改一下。祝周末快乐！

柳浪闻莺

谢谢四海总版点评，经老师一指点，我觉得确实是太直白了，呵呵，原来写打油诗习惯了，自己直接就赤膊上阵了。我领悟了老师的意思。我再认真修改一下。

四海一棋

附议楼上！其他“<span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\" Roman?? new=\"New\" ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New?>山头不敢频回首，忍见双亲泪眼红”似乎也直白了些，缺乏含蓄，当以景结为好。</span>

柳浪闻莺

<p style=\"MARGIN: 0cm=\"0cm\"  0cm=\"0cm\"  0pt\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\"  Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\"  Roman\'\">根据各位老师点评意见修改如下：</span></p>
<p style=\"MARGIN: 0cm=\"0cm\"  0cm=\"0cm\"  0pt\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\"  Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\"  Roman\'\"></span> </p>
<p style=\"MARGIN: 0cm=\"0cm\"  0cm=\"0cm\"  0pt\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-bidi-font-size: 10.5pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\"  Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\"  Roman\'\">雏燕归来羽未丰，村前古树记蒙童。<br/>如今又别巢堂去，暮雨江天淡淡风。</span></p>