原创 庆春宫（故地重来）

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<span style="FONT: medium="medium"  =; TEXT-TRANSFORM: none; TEXT-INDENT: 0px; BORDER-COLLAPSE: separate; WIDOWS: 2" medium?=" class="><span style="medium: " medium?=" 14px: rgb(255,255,255); 宋体: 21px? 0px? 0px; normal; PADDING-TOP: BORDER-LEFT-WIDTH: WORD-BREAK: BORDER-BOTTOM-WIDTH: BORDER-TOP-WIDTH: WORD-WRAP: PADDING-RIGHT: PADDING-LEFT: 5px; rgb(0,0,0)? WORD-SPACING: -webkit-border-horizontal-spacing: -webkit-border-vertical-spacing: -webkit-text-decorations-in-effect: -webkit-text-size-adjust: auto; -webkit-text-stroke-width:><font style=" size="3" color="#333333" normal? WORD-BREAK: normal; WORD-WRAP: 黑体; FONT-FAMILY: 24px; LINE-HEIGHT:>庆春宫</font>
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<p style="MARGIN-TOP: 0px; PADDING-BOTTOM: 0px; MARGIN-LEFT: 0px; LINE-HEIGHT: 21px; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0px; LIST-STYLE-TYPE: none; BORDER-RIGHT-WIDTH: 0px" WORD-BREAK: normal; WORD-WRAP: 0px="0px" 5px; PADDING-LEFT: PADDING-RIGHT: BORDER-TOP-WIDTH: BORDER-BOTTOM-WIDTH: BORDER-LEFT-WIDTH: PADDING-TOP: 0px; 0px?><font style="WORD-BREAK: normal; LINE-HEIGHT: 24px; FONT-FAMILY: 黑体; WORD-WRAP: normal" color="#333333" size="3">野陌残阳，荒阶碎叶，西风频送秋声。</font></p>
<p style="MARGIN-TOP: 0px; PADDING-BOTTOM: 0px; MARGIN-LEFT: 0px; LINE-HEIGHT: 21px; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0px; LIST-STYLE-TYPE: none; BORDER-RIGHT-WIDTH: 0px" WORD-BREAK: normal; WORD-WRAP: 0px="0px" 5px; PADDING-LEFT: PADDING-RIGHT: BORDER-TOP-WIDTH: BORDER-BOTTOM-WIDTH: BORDER-LEFT-WIDTH: PADDING-TOP: 0px; 0px?><font style="WORD-BREAK: normal; LINE-HEIGHT: 24px; FONT-FAMILY: 黑体; WORD-WRAP: normal" color="#333333" size="3">堆积枯残，摇曳连理，轮回一树零丁。</font></p>
<p style="MARGIN-TOP: 0px; PADDING-BOTTOM: 0px; MARGIN-LEFT: 0px; LINE-HEIGHT: 21px; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0px; LIST-STYLE-TYPE: none; BORDER-RIGHT-WIDTH: 0px" WORD-BREAK: normal; WORD-WRAP: 0px="0px" 5px; PADDING-LEFT: PADDING-RIGHT: BORDER-TOP-WIDTH: BORDER-BOTTOM-WIDTH: BORDER-LEFT-WIDTH: PADDING-TOP: 0px; 0px?><font style="WORD-BREAK: normal; LINE-HEIGHT: 21px; FONT-FAMILY: 黑体; WORD-WRAP: normal"><font style="WORD-BREAK: normal; LINE-HEIGHT: 21px; WORD-WRAP: normal"><font color="#333333"><font size="3"><font style="WORD-BREAK: normal; LINE-HEIGHT: 24px; WORD-WRAP: normal">石边霜菊</font><font style="WORD-BREAK: normal; LINE-HEIGHT: 24px; WORD-WRAP: normal">，已惯看、云浮雁征。</font></font></font></font></font></p>
<p style="MARGIN-TOP: 0px; PADDING-BOTTOM: 0px; MARGIN-LEFT: 0px; LINE-HEIGHT: 21px; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0px; LIST-STYLE-TYPE: none; BORDER-RIGHT-WIDTH: 0px" WORD-BREAK: normal; WORD-WRAP: 0px="0px" 5px; PADDING-LEFT: PADDING-RIGHT: BORDER-TOP-WIDTH: BORDER-BOTTOM-WIDTH: BORDER-LEFT-WIDTH: PADDING-TOP: 0px; 0px?><font style="WORD-BREAK: normal; LINE-HEIGHT: 24px; FONT-FAMILY: 黑体; WORD-WRAP: normal" color="#333333" size="3">不堪时节，幽处重来，只影凄行。</font></p>
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<p style="MARGIN-TOP: 0px; PADDING-BOTTOM: 0px; MARGIN-LEFT: 0px; LINE-HEIGHT: 21px; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0px; LIST-STYLE-TYPE: none; BORDER-RIGHT-WIDTH: 0px" WORD-BREAK: normal; WORD-WRAP: 0px="0px" 5px; PADDING-LEFT: PADDING-RIGHT: BORDER-TOP-WIDTH: BORDER-BOTTOM-WIDTH: BORDER-LEFT-WIDTH: PADDING-TOP: 0px; 0px?><font style="WORD-BREAK: normal; LINE-HEIGHT: 24px; FONT-FAMILY: 黑体; WORD-WRAP: normal" color="#333333" size="3">梦魂许是无凭，那时枫红，多少牵萦。</font></p>
<p style="MARGIN-TOP: 0px; PADDING-BOTTOM: 0px; MARGIN-LEFT: 0px; LINE-HEIGHT: 21px; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0px; LIST-STYLE-TYPE: none; BORDER-RIGHT-WIDTH: 0px" WORD-BREAK: normal; WORD-WRAP: 0px="0px" 5px; PADDING-LEFT: PADDING-RIGHT: BORDER-TOP-WIDTH: BORDER-BOTTOM-WIDTH: BORDER-LEFT-WIDTH: PADDING-TOP: 0px; 0px?><font style="WORD-BREAK: normal; LINE-HEIGHT: 24px; FONT-FAMILY: 黑体; WORD-WRAP: normal" color="#333333" size="3">心曲依依，待君来谱，谁知顿失泠泠。</font></p>
<p style="MARGIN-TOP: 0px; PADDING-BOTTOM: 0px; MARGIN-LEFT: 0px; LINE-HEIGHT: 21px; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0px; LIST-STYLE-TYPE: none; BORDER-RIGHT-WIDTH: 0px" WORD-BREAK: normal; WORD-WRAP: 0px="0px" 5px; PADDING-LEFT: PADDING-RIGHT: BORDER-TOP-WIDTH: BORDER-BOTTOM-WIDTH: BORDER-LEFT-WIDTH: PADDING-TOP: 0px; 0px?><font style="WORD-BREAK: normal; LINE-HEIGHT: 24px; FONT-FAMILY: 黑体; WORD-WRAP: normal" color="#333333" size="3">天涯音绝，恨此景、相思叠增。</font></p>
<p style="MARGIN-TOP: 0px; PADDING-BOTTOM: 0px; MARGIN-LEFT: 0px; LINE-HEIGHT: 21px; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0px; LIST-STYLE-TYPE: none; BORDER-RIGHT-WIDTH: 0px" WORD-BREAK: normal; WORD-WRAP: 0px="0px" 5px; PADDING-LEFT: PADDING-RIGHT: BORDER-TOP-WIDTH: BORDER-BOTTOM-WIDTH: BORDER-LEFT-WIDTH: PADDING-TOP: 0px; 0px?><font style="WORD-BREAK: normal; LINE-HEIGHT: 24px; FONT-FAMILY: 黑体; WORD-WRAP: normal" color="#333333" size="3">连山衰草，遮目黛峰，负了双睛。</font></p></span></span>

[此贴子已经被梅影点点于2010-11-19 7:42:17编辑过]

梅影点点

整体确实不错，写出了秋的凄凉韵味，飘红共赏！

梅影

谢梅版主品鉴鼓励，祝好！

梅影

谢谢版主临屏品鉴，美言鼓励，祝好。

一阳居士

<p style=\"MARGIN-TOP: 0px; PADDING-BOTTOM: 0px; MARGIN-LEFT: 0px; LINE-HEIGHT: 21px; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0px; LIST-STYLE-TYPE: none; BORDER-RIGHT-WIDTH: 0px\" 0px? 0px; normal; PADDING-TOP: BORDER-LEFT-WIDTH: WORD-BREAK: BORDER-BOTTOM-WIDTH: BORDER-TOP-WIDTH: WORD-WRAP: PADDING-RIGHT: PADDING-LEFT: 5px; 0px=\"0px\"><font style=\"WORD-BREAK: normal; LINE-HEIGHT: 24px; FONT-FAMILY: 黑体; WORD-WRAP: normal\" color=\"#333333\" size=\"3\">不堪时节，幽处重来，只影凄行。</font></p>
<p style=\"MARGIN-TOP: 0px; PADDING-BOTTOM: 0px; MARGIN-LEFT: 0px; LINE-HEIGHT: 21px; MARGIN-RIGHT: 0px; LIST-STYLE-TYPE: none; BORDER-RIGHT-WIDTH: 0px\" 0px? 0px; normal; PADDING-TOP: BORDER-LEFT-WIDTH: WORD-BREAK: BORDER-BOTTOM-WIDTH: BORDER-TOP-WIDTH: WORD-WRAP: PADDING-RIGHT: PADDING-LEFT: 5px; 0px=\"0px\"><font style=\"WORD-BREAK: normal; LINE-HEIGHT: 24px; FONT-FAMILY: 黑体; WORD-WRAP: normal\" color=\"#333333\" size=\"3\">连山衰草，断目黛峰，负了双睛。</font></p>
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<p><font face=\"黑体\" color=\"#333333\" size=\"3\">上下片均为好结，古韵犹浓，婉约流畅，雅赏！</font></p>

汉唐的风

整体不错，个别处还需斟酌：如“西风频荡尘声”、“阕情”、“断目黛峰”等。。。

梅影

<div class=\"quote\"><b>以下是引用<i>汉唐的风</i>在2010-11-18 12:24:09的发言：</b><br/>整体不错，个别处还需斟酌：如“西风频荡尘声”、“阕情”、“断目黛峰”等。。。 </div>
<p>嗯，用词不妥，我来改改。再谢。</p>