[原创]五律?咏梅

四海一棋

<font face="楷体_GB2312" color="#000000" size="4"><strong>暗香浮浊世，长与鹤相邻。 </strong></font>
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[此贴子已经被紫嫣郡主于2009-10-08 16:12:07编辑过]

司马长风

甚佳。中二联妙。“直”乃入声，应平，请再斟酌。

浪中行吟

欣赏！

四海一棋

<div class=\"quote\"><b>以下是引用<i>司马长风</i>在2009-10-07 14:20:00的发言：</b><br/>甚佳。中二联妙。“直”乃入声，应平，请再斟酌。 </div>
<p>吟兄所言极是!拙作乃三年前所写,今重发,亦未细琢,故而纰漏.谢谢!握手!</p>

梅影点点

<strong><font face=\"黑体\" color=\"#008000\" size=\"4\">莫道留清骨，天然著淡心</font></strong><img src=\"images/post/smile/dvbbs/em68.gif\" />尤欣赏尾句！

四海一棋

<div class=\"quote\"><b>以下是引用<i>湘弦绝响</i>在2009-10-08 15:29:39的发言：</b><br/>
<p>十一真、十二侵混了。</p>
<p>若五律求精，第四句一\"岭\"字为仄，则是孤音。</p></div>
<p>谢谢！旧作直接贴来发了，没细琢！当考虑改之。</p>

四海一棋

<div class=\"quote\"><b>以下是引用<i>飞花似梦0</i>在2009-10-07 18:34:55的发言：</b><br/><strong><font face=\"黑体\" color=\"#008000\" size=\"4\">莫道留清骨，天然著淡心。</font></strong>欣赏! </div>
<p>谢谢！</p>

四海一棋

<div class=\"quote\"><b>以下是引用<i>梅影点点</i>在2009-10-07 18:16:12的发言：</b><br/><strong><font face=\"黑体\" color=\"#008000\" size=\"4\">莫道留清骨，天然著淡心</font></strong><img title=\"dvubb\" alt=\"图片点击可在新窗口打开查看\" src=\"http://www.zhgfwx.com/bbs/images/emot/em68.gif\" align=\"middle\" border=\"0\"/>尤欣赏尾句！ </div>
<p>谢谢！</p>

四海一棋

<div class=\"quote\"><b>以下是引用<i>顽石</i>在2009-10-08 19:37:19的发言：</b><br/>好律！学习！ </div>
<p>谢谢！问好！</p>