[原创醉蓬莱?凇花雪月

一阳居士

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<p align="left"><br/><font style="FONT-SIZE: 18px" color="#2f3699"><strong> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr>    <font color="#000000">渐风平雪霁，雾散云开，金蟾初俏。桂影婆娑，与鎏光争耀。碧水缠绵，霓虹羞涩，探鳞波星跳。沉醉江滨，凇枝如璨，玉容花貌。</font></strong></font></p>
<p align="left"><font style="FONT-SIZE: 18px" color="#000000"><strong> <wbr> <wbr> <wbr>    月透娇颜，银须难饰，披挂绒装，霜含青杪。独隐阑珊，问苍穹声悄。伏案凝眸，寻词索句，有佳音萦绕。意笃奇葩，心仪冰绾，此情谁料？</strong></font></p>
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[此贴子已经被紫嫣郡主于2010-12-28 11:38:44编辑过]

紫嫣郡主

碧水缠绵，霓虹羞涩，探鳞波星跳。沉醉江滨，凇枝如璨，玉容花貌。<img src=\"images/post/smile/dvbbs/em23.gif\" />?好兄！

一阳居士

<div class=\"quote\"><b>以下是引用<i>曲径通幽</i>在2010-12-23 19:29:39的发言：</b><br/>真好，我是来学习的。问好！ </div>
<p>谢谢点评，还望多提宝贵意见！</p>

曲径通幽

真好，我是来学习的。问好！

卢五

<p>欣赏好词,文至结拍,完成大半工程,过片无力.个见</p>

心中有人

好。学习。

萧萧易水寒

<p>一阳版主好词，寓情于景，情景交融！</p>
<p>附一首旧作以助兴：</p>
<p style=\"MARGIN-LEFT: 18pt\"><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt\"><font face=\"宋体\">醉蓬莱<span lang=\"EN-US\">*</span>塞下曲（新韵）<span lang=\"EN-US\"><?xml:namespace prefix = o ns = \"urn:schemas-microsoft-comfficeffice\" /><o:p></o:p></span></font></span></p>
<p style=\"TEXT-ALIGN: left; MARGIN: 0cm=\"0cm\"  0cm=\"0cm\"  0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan\" class=\"MsoNormal\" align=\"left\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\"  Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\"  Roman\'\">又登台望远，仟莽苍茫，</span><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\">怅然无计</span><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\"  Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\"  Roman\'\">。</span><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt\" lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p style=\"TEXT-ALIGN: left; MARGIN: 0cm=\"0cm\"  0cm=\"0cm\"  0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan\" class=\"MsoNormal\" align=\"left\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\"  Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\"  Roman\'\">遥忆江南？泪涔涔无语。</span><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\" lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p style=\"TEXT-ALIGN: left; MARGIN: 0cm=\"0cm\"  0cm=\"0cm\"  0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan\" class=\"MsoNormal\" align=\"left\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\">月桂香微，傲枫红浅，满目阑珊意。<span lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p></o:p></span></span></p>
<p style=\"TEXT-ALIGN: left; MARGIN: 0cm=\"0cm\"  0cm=\"0cm\"  0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan\" class=\"MsoNormal\" align=\"left\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\"  Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\"  Roman\'\">血色残阳，孑行雁远，感怀</span><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\"  Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\"  Roman\'\">凄许</span><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\"  Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\"  Roman\'\">。</span><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\" lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p style=\"TEXT-ALIGN: left; MARGIN: 0cm=\"0cm\"  0cm=\"0cm\"  0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan\" class=\"MsoNormal\" align=\"left\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\" lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p> </o:p></span></p>
<p style=\"TEXT-ALIGN: left; MARGIN: 0cm=\"0cm\"  0cm=\"0cm\"  0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan\" class=\"MsoNormal\" align=\"left\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\"  Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\"  Roman\'\">漫道雄关，怒云席雪，铁盾苍苍，甲衣寒气。</span><font face=\"Times New=\"New\"  Roman\"><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt\" lang=\"EN-US\">  </span><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\" lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p></o:p></span></font></p>
<p style=\"TEXT-ALIGN: left; MARGIN: 0cm=\"0cm\"  0cm=\"0cm\"  0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan\" class=\"MsoNormal\" align=\"left\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\"  Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\"  Roman\'\">浊泪何寻，看战袍陈迹。</span><font face=\"Times New=\"New\"  Roman\"><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt\" lang=\"EN-US\">  </span><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\" lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p></o:p></span></font></p>
<p style=\"TEXT-ALIGN: left; MARGIN: 0cm=\"0cm\"  0cm=\"0cm\"  0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan\" class=\"MsoNormal\" align=\"left\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\"  Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\"  Roman\'\">月倚辕门，剑卧虎帐，醉</span><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\">望家千里</span><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\"  Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\"  Roman\'\">。</span><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt\" lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p style=\"TEXT-ALIGN: left; MARGIN: 0cm=\"0cm\"  0cm=\"0cm\"  0pt; mso-pagination: widow-orphan\" class=\"MsoNormal\" align=\"left\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\"  Roman\'; mso-hansi-font-family: \'Times New=\"New\"  Roman\'\">朔角悠悠，催人肠断，几时归去？</span><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\" lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
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一阳居士

<div class=\"quote\"><b>以下是引用<i>隔水伊人</i>在2010-12-15 14:12:08的发言：</b><br/>
<p>都是四字句呢,好??排哦.品???了!?候一?!</p></div>
<p>下雪了，也出现了雾凇奇观，填一首与大家共赏！</p>

浪中行吟

用词清婉，欣赏好词！

谊之

<p>呵呵~~</p>
<p>学习了！！！</p>

溪塘过雪

学习欣赏一阳首版美词！问好！

蓝冰

上阕描景，下阕抒情，情景入目入心，欣赏了！

隔水伊人

<p>都是四字句呢,好??排哦.品???了!?候一?!</p>

一阳居士

<div class=\"quote\"><b>以下是引用<i>思逸潇湘</i>在2010-12-13 17:04:07的发言：</b><br/>
<p>    渐风平雪霁，雾散云开，银蟾初俏。桂影婆娑，与鳞光争耀。碧水缠绵，霓虹羞涩，探鎏波星跳。</p>
<p>精炼简洁，朴实无华，描摹细腻，形象生动，富有较强的感染力。叹赏！</p></div>
<p>谢谢潇湘点评，多提建议，问好！</p>

一阳居士

<p>谢谢诸位点评，特别感谢卢五楼主高见！</p>

一阳居士

<div class=\"quote\"><b>以下是引用<i>卢五</i>在2010-12-19 22:21:28的发言：</b><br/>
<p>欣赏好词,文至结拍,完成大半工程,过片无力.个见</p></div>
<p>按诗友的旨意过片重构，顺祝冬祺！</p>

一阳居士

<div class=\"quote\"><b>以下是引用<i>心中有人</i>在2010-12-19 17:00:53的发言：</b><br/>好。学习。 </div>
<p>谢谢好友！问好！</p>

一阳居士

<div class=\"quote\"><b>以下是引用<i>浪中行吟</i>在2010-12-19 16:25:50的发言：</b><br/>用词清婉，欣赏好词！ </div>
<p>谢谢总版雅评！顺祝冬祺！</p>

一阳居士

<div class=\"quote\"><b>以下是引用<i>萧萧易水寒</i>在2010-12-19 8:57:31的发言：</b><br/>
<p>一阳版主好词，寓情于景，情景交融！</p>
<p>附一首旧作以助兴：</p>
<p style=\"MARGIN-LEFT: 18pt\"><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt\"><font face=\"宋体\">醉蓬莱<span lang=\"EN-US\">*</span>塞下曲（新韵）<span lang=\"EN-US\"><?xml:namespace prefix = o ns = \"urn:schemas-microsoft-comfficeffice\" /><o:p></o:p></span></font></span></p>
<p style=\"TEXT-ALIGN: left\" class=\"MsoNormal\" align=\"left\" widow-orphan? mso-pagination: 0pt; 0cm=\"0cm\" 0cm?><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\"\'\"\" Roman?? new=\"New\" ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New?>又登台望远，仟莽苍茫，</span><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\">怅然无计</span><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\"\'\"\" Roman?? new=\"New\" ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New?>。</span><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt\" lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p style=\"TEXT-ALIGN: left\" class=\"MsoNormal\" align=\"left\" widow-orphan? mso-pagination: 0pt; 0cm=\"0cm\" 0cm?><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\"\'\"\" Roman?? new=\"New\" ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New?>遥忆江南？泪涔涔无语。</span><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\" lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p style=\"TEXT-ALIGN: left\" class=\"MsoNormal\" align=\"left\" widow-orphan? mso-pagination: 0pt; 0cm=\"0cm\" 0cm?><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\">月桂香微，傲枫红浅，满目阑珊意。<span lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p></o:p></span></span></p>
<p style=\"TEXT-ALIGN: left\" class=\"MsoNormal\" align=\"left\" widow-orphan? mso-pagination: 0pt; 0cm=\"0cm\" 0cm?><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\"\';\" mso-font-kerning: 0pt\" Roman?? new=\"New\" ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New?>血色残阳，孑行雁远，感怀</span><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\"\'\"\" Roman?? new=\"New\" ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New?>凄许</span><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\"\';\" mso-font-kerning: 0pt\" Roman?? new=\"New\" ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New?>。</span><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\" lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p style=\"TEXT-ALIGN: left\" class=\"MsoNormal\" align=\"left\" widow-orphan? mso-pagination: 0pt; 0cm=\"0cm\" 0cm?><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\" lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p> </o:p></span></p>
<p style=\"TEXT-ALIGN: left\" class=\"MsoNormal\" align=\"left\" widow-orphan? mso-pagination: 0pt; 0cm=\"0cm\" 0cm?><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\"\'\"\" Roman?? new=\"New\" ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New?>漫道雄关，怒云席雪，铁盾苍苍，甲衣寒气。</span><font face=\"Times new=\" New? Roman?><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt\" lang=\"EN-US\">  </span><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\" lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p></o:p></span></font></p>
<p style=\"TEXT-ALIGN: left\" class=\"MsoNormal\" align=\"left\" widow-orphan? mso-pagination: 0pt; 0cm=\"0cm\" 0cm?><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\"\'\"\" Roman?? new=\"New\" ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New?>浊泪何寻，看战袍陈迹。</span><font face=\"Times new=\" New? Roman?><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt\" lang=\"EN-US\">  </span><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\" lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p></o:p></span></font></p>
<p style=\"TEXT-ALIGN: left\" class=\"MsoNormal\" align=\"left\" widow-orphan? mso-pagination: 0pt; 0cm=\"0cm\" 0cm?><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\"\'\"\" Roman?? new=\"New\" ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New?>月倚辕门，剑卧虎帐，醉</span><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\">望家千里</span><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\"\'\"\" Roman?? new=\"New\" ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New?>。</span><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt\" lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p style=\"TEXT-ALIGN: left\" class=\"MsoNormal\" align=\"left\" widow-orphan? mso-pagination: 0pt; 0cm=\"0cm\" 0cm?><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\"\'\"\" Roman?? new=\"New\" ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New?>朔角悠悠，催人肠断，几时归去？</span><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体\" lang=\"EN-US\"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
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<p>欣赏美词，我还是头一次填此调！</p>

一阳居士

<div class=\"quote\"><b>以下是引用<i>砚浓</i>在2010-12-17 16:50:44的发言：</b><br/>我是来学习的 </div>
<p>谢谢砚浓诗友！问好！</p>