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[原创]一肩香雪落梅花

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发表于 2010-8-15 23:15:03 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
<center><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face="楷体_GB2312" color="#cc66ff" size="4">(一)</font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></center>
<center><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face="楷体_GB2312" color="#cc66ff" size="4">一肩香雪落梅花,轻捻心思入碧笳。</font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></center>
<center><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face="楷体_GB2312" color="#cc66ff" size="4">枕石寒衣空照月,倚栏孑影自烹茶。<br/></center></font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em">
<center><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face="楷体_GB2312" color="#cc66ff" size="4">朝参暮谒怜风雅,斗转星移感物华。</font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></center>
<center><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face="楷体_GB2312" color="#cc66ff" size="4">欲</font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face="楷体_GB2312" color="#cc66ff" size="4">拟文章书缱绻,浅斟杯酒话桑麻。</font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></center><br/>
<center><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face="楷体_GB2312" color="#cc66ff" size="4">(二)</font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></center>
<center><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face="楷体_GB2312" color="#cc66ff" size="4">帘卷西风散绮霞,一肩香雪落梅花。</font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></center>
<center><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face="楷体_GB2312" color="#cc66ff" size="4">神游故里愁肠断,影入空菱素鬓斜。</font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></center>
<center><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face="楷体_GB2312" color="#cc66ff" size="4"><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face="楷体_GB2312" color="#cc66ff" size="4">浊酒几杯眈客念,寒霜数点冷胡笳</font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em">。</font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></center>
<center><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face="楷体_GB2312" color="#cc66ff" size="4">十年相思浑如梦,雁断衡阳往事嗟。</font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></center>
<center><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face="楷体_GB2312" color="#cc66ff" size="4">(三)</font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></center>
<center><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face="楷体_GB2312" color="#cc66ff" size="4">烟笼寒水月笼纱,写意丹青雅兴赊。</font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></center>
<center><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face="楷体_GB2312" color="#cc66ff" size="4">数阕清辞寒篆笔,一肩香雪落梅花。</font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></center>
<center><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face="楷体_GB2312" color="#cc66ff" size="4">借醪独醉思幽客,顾影空怜念韶华。</font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></center>
<center><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face="楷体_GB2312" color="#cc66ff" size="4">往事</font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face="楷体_GB2312" color="#cc66ff" size="4">依稀辉照里,轻愁不胜向尘涯。</font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></center>
<center><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face="楷体_GB2312" color="#cc66ff" size="4">(四)</font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></center>
<center><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face="楷体_GB2312" color="#cc66ff" size="4">独坐屏前忆韶华,半明寒月半窗纱。</font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></center>
<center><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face="楷体_GB2312" color="#cc66ff" size="4">吟章遣兴激情起,泼墨抒怀倦意加。</font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></center>
<center><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face="楷体_GB2312" color="#cc66ff" size="4">几缕愁思涂寂寞,一肩香雪落梅花。</font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></center>
<center><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face="楷体_GB2312" color="#cc66ff" size="4">浮云往事随烟远,数阕高歌漫入茶。</font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></center>
<center><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face="楷体_GB2312"><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" size="4"><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" color="#cc66ff">(五)</font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></center>
<center><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face="楷体_GB2312"><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" size="4"><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" color="#cc66ff">当年空月几繁华?煮酒青梅醉凤琶。</font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></center>
<center><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face="楷体_GB2312"><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" size="4"><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" color="#cc66ff">别境流芳烟水阔,清妍入画柯枝斜。</font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></center>
<center><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face="楷体_GB2312"><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" size="4"><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" color="#cc66ff">曾潜笔彩诗心苦,已阻蓬山蝶梦遐。</font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></center>
<center><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face="楷体_GB2312"><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" size="4"><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" color="#cc66ff">怅立风中愁自绾,一肩香雪落梅花。</font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face="楷体_GB2312"><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" size="4"><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" color="#cc66ff"><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" color="#000000"><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" face="楷体_GB2312" color="#cc66ff" size="4"><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" color="#000000" size="3"><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" color="#800080"><font style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em" color="#000000"><br/></font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></font><wbr style="LINE-HEIGHT: 1.3em"></center>
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沙发
发表于 2010-8-16 00:04:28 | 只看该作者
欣赏!问好<font face=\"Verdana\" color=\"#61b713\"><b>淡若花痕</b></font>!
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板凳
发表于 2010-8-16 01:32:03 | 只看该作者
问好楼主!佳句多多,值得学习。窃以为,还可以更好更精致一点,比如斗转与星移它有区别吗?这样写就空占字位了,而改对句势必修改出句,腾出来的字位又可以增加新的内涵。让每一个字位都落实到实处岂不是更好。
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地板
发表于 2010-8-16 20:38:26 | 只看该作者
<p>一肩香雪落梅花-----很有意境的句轴!</p>
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<p>这组轱辘拓得很开,但未得句轴之味,格律也多有疏漏!</p>
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发表于 2010-8-16 21:19:52 | 只看该作者
一肩香雪落梅花。好轴句!!欣赏一组佳作。问好!
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