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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" new="New" mso-hansi-font-family: ?Times Roman?? Roman?; New?>其一</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"><?xml:namespace prefix = o ns = "urn:schemas-microsoft-comfficeffice" /><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" new="New" mso-hansi-font-family: ?Times Roman?? Roman?; New?>一会三中带甲开，议排凡是挽春回。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" new="New" mso-hansi-font-family: ?Times Roman?? Roman?; New?>风来绿岸猜颜色，雨送红羊洗劫灰。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" new="New" mso-hansi-font-family: ?Times Roman?? Roman?; New?>摸石头过河有几，论黄黑捉鼠能魁。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" new="New" mso-hansi-font-family: ?Times Roman?? Roman?; New?>文明两个终偏废，公作腰遮私作媒。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" new="New" mso-hansi-font-family: ?Times Roman?? Roman?; New?>其二</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" new="New" mso-hansi-font-family: ?Times Roman?? Roman?; New?>总戎淮海亦殊勋，文立恩威武拔军。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" new="New" mso-hansi-font-family: ?Times Roman?? Roman?; New?>势累声名标进退，才因老壮接风云。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" new="New" mso-hansi-font-family: ?Times Roman?? Roman?; New?>出山不以官为念，掌舵能思岁去勤。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"><o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Times new=" new="New" mso-hansi-font-family: ?Times Roman?? Roman?; New?>故事春深犹唱处，十年功过意纷纷。</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt"><o:p></o:p></span></p>

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荣西安

<p>故事春深犹唱处，十年功过意纷纷。</p>
<p><br/>点睛之笔。</p>
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司马长风

<p><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\" Roman?? new=\"New\" ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New?><font color=\"#0000ff\" size=\"3\">“<strong>一会三中带甲开，议排凡是挽春回</strong>”，“带甲开”何其恐怖，“议”字稍弱，莫若“力排”。</font></span></p>
<p><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\" Roman?? new=\"New\" ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New?><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\" Roman?? new=\"New\" ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New?><font color=\"#0000ff\" size=\"3\">“<strong>摸石头过河有几，论黄黑捉鼠能魁</strong>”此打破定式，然终觉拗口。</font></span></span></p>
<p><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\" Roman?? new=\"New\" ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New?><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\" Roman?? new=\"New\" ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New?><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\" Roman?? new=\"New\" ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New?><font color=\"#0000ff\" size=\"3\">“<strong>总戎淮海异殊勋</strong>”，“异殊”现赘。</font></span></span></span></p>
<p><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\" Roman?? new=\"New\" ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New?><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\" Roman?? new=\"New\" ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New?><span style=\"FONT-SIZE: 14pt; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\" Roman?? new=\"New\" ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New?><font color=\"#0000ff\" size=\"3\">“<strong>才因暮气接风云</strong>”，“暮气”似不妥，此“因”亦似不构成因果。</font></span></span></span></p>

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观风禅

<p><font size=\"3\"><font color=\"#000000\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\"\'\"\" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new=\"New\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\"\'\"\" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new=\"New\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\"\'\"\" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new=\"New\"><font size=\"3\">问好三位！回首版：因以上所指几处是经过细酌的，所以说明一下。“带甲”二字并不很好，因没写出现代感来，但主旨是说明当时的背景是发生了军事政变。议排最初是作力排，用议排二字是为了说明当时两个凡是是经过争论的。第一首三联的拗格是有意用的，因这两句话说得太多了，意思大家都明白，所以想在句式上打破一下<font color=\"#000000\">。<span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\"\'\"\" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new=\"New\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\"\'\"\" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new=\"New\"><span style=\"FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; FONT-SIZE: 14pt; mso-ascii-font-family: \'Times new=\"\'\"\" Roman?? ?Times mso-hansi-font-family: Roman?; New? new=\"New\">“<strong>总戎淮海异殊勋</strong>”，这里用建或见字或许更稳妥，用异字主要是因为淮海战役邓虽是最高领导，其实真正的军事指挥是粟裕，功最大也是粟裕。邓的功绩应是在全局把握和政治动员后勤保障等方面，非林彪式的殊勋，所以特用异。才因暮气之因，并不是因果之意，而因循之意，不过暮气二字确实在色彩上不大适合，从公议，改一下。谢谢置评！</span></span></span></font></font></span></span></span></font></font></p>

司马长风

<p><font color=\"#0000ff\" size=\"3\">英雄所见尚且“略同”，况于在下碌碌之辈。作者之意、读者之意或有不同，此亦常事。</font></p>
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